Eddie Davidson: Blog

I am a little exhausted of the NIS Program after writing 75 chapters. I am publishing as fast as I can get them edited.

The NIS Breeder Program was designed to produce a child in a future society where donors to the Program will adopt the children. It was to teach students about natural child birth, breast feeding, and also a dynamic power exchange relationship.

The main character is a mother, who agrees to obey her daughter for the entire time. She becomes the breeder and her daughter becomes the Trainer.

However, today it occurred to me that I could (or someone could) write a story about a Fight Club style high school.

Students will voluntarily agree to stage regular fights, some of which might be Sumo style, Wrestling, Kick Boxing, weapons, and reasonable requests could involve being able to take a punch, or having one's tits used as a speed bag. (fun bags).

I'd love to have the mothers be volunteers in the Program again because that was fun the first time.

Those of you who are reading the NIS Program, I'd love your feedback on whether that might be interesting. It'd be far more brutal and pain centric.

I tried to spend a lot of time at the start of NIS Breeder creating a plausible framework for this variation of the Program. A declining population + a society where public nudity is legal everywhere and sexuality/sexual expression is more main stream and not quite as taboo as it is now.

My original use for the main character's husband was to have him ask the questions that I thought many readers might ask. "What the hell does (shaking your tits or whatever) have to do with learning things in school? What about Math, Science and English? When do you learn that?

It might be fun to do a story like that or to inspire someone else to write one. I could imagine the first rule of NIS Fight Club is you actually have to TALK about Fight Club.

Body positivity, sexual expression, and self-defense rolled up into one Program. One of the Program's stated goals is to normalize fetishes, and one of them (for many) is watching women pull each other's tits, slap each other's faces and yank on each other labia while wrestling in the nude.

I once read a Japanese cartoon about a "Fight High School". There was very little context. A pretty girl shows up and some students beat the snot out of her with a baseball bat and then the next frame she is limping, naked, tits bruised.

If I did something like this, I think I'd take that approach to rough stuff, where no one ends up in the hospital with broken bones/missing teeth. Perhaps there is some medical technology that ensures that cuts heal quickly that allows the students to get beat up/dragged down without any permanent harm. I am not into permanent harm.

Let's face it, there is a lot of incest stories on this site.

It's all fantasy, no one's child hood is ruined. We are all adults. It's all just a fetish/fun.

However, any time there is a Holiday like Father's Day I always like to imagine what it would be like in a family that is well-adjusted enough to be open about their sexuality. Especially one that includes BDSM in their daily routine and have a bit of a hierarchy.

As an example, what would Father's day be like in a family where Dad is the Master. His sons are treated like Princes. There is a sign on the wall "Girls learn when butts burn" and "Boys rule, girls drool" and mom and daughters are submissive?

What kind of presents would he get? What would they do differently?

Or how about a family with a Cuckold father in a healthy dynamic Female Led Relationship. "Okay, today you get pizza"

"Just the crusts as usual, Dear?"

"No, you can have two slices with the rest of us, Henry. You've been a good boy. Happy Father's Day!"

If you are sitting around reading these stories and you've ever thought about writing. Why not start with a premise like that?

It doesn't have to be grammatically perfect. Just write and see what happens? That's how all the authors on this site usually start. We start "Somewhere".

We got inspired by the other authors and decided to visualize our fantasies and write them down. In my case, I get to live vicariously through Henry or the Master Dom-Daddy and experience their lives as I breathe life into their reality and share for others.

Speaking of Dom-Daddy's;

Mike McGifford started on a story about 4 years ago that I loved. It was called "Visiting Aunt Scarlet".

Mike's thrown away some stories he never finished that were better than anything I've ever produced. He is a brilliant writer. I collect some of his better half-finished projects and publish them in a short story anthology with illustrations after cleaning them up.

However, before I started scribing those down, I got a hold of this story. We worked on it together and he told me I could publish it. I wrote about two chapters and sort of painted myself into a creative hole. I didn't want to finish the story. Much to my chagrin it's sat in the unfinished pile for years.

Until NOW.

https://storiesonline.net/s/23522/visiting-aunt-scarlet

So for Father's Day, I present to you the HD version of "Visiting Aunt Scarlet". I've added illustrations. I've updated the grammar/spelling. I've also changed the velocity of the story. If you read it before -please start from scratch.

I am trying a new AI tool to illustrate persistent characters and it's not quite as good as the one I was using. However, the pictures are more realistic looking.

I've got six chapters posted. I plan to post up a seventh soon. I'll keep that story going to the end and post it alongside the NIS: Breeder Story.

The NIS: Breeder story is getting a lot of positive feedback. I really enjoyed writing. I merged about six or seven stories I wanted to write into a single idea and that's how I ended up with 75 chapters. Most chapters are between 12-15 pages typed, so this is absolutely the longest story I've ever published on SOL.

Today, someone told me I could put it on Bookapy. I am reminded of a quote.

"I love money..no, like I REALLY love money."
-Frito

I do love money, but at the same time I'd never charge for my work. I am not sure it's good enough to charge, and I like just sharing it with the world.

If you ever want to repay me, I don't ask you to join a patreon or send me anything. The best way to repay me is to be inspired by something I wrote and write something of your own.

Perhaps this weekend, you'll start on a good Father's day story?

I had a reader decide to send me a nasty gram about NIS Breeders that it had taken 19 chapters to tell the first three days of the story.

He said "Other than that, it's a good story".

Wow, talk about demotivational.

Imagine if I just skimped and summarized the days into a few paragraphs. He'd complain about that.

I spent a LOT of time really painting the world in which the characters live. I have been working on SHOWING instead of TELLING the reader things.

I've been enjoying being more descriptive about body language instead of only telling you what the character's emotions are. I've joyously described the character's relationships, the background, etc. to establish the foundation of what is one of the longest stories I've ever written.

For example, when Karen is very serious, I want the reader to get that from her body language and how she signs up for extra credit without hesitation. How she reacts to getting a reward of chewing gum for good behavior. Etc.

The first three days were crucial to build that up. One little easter egg you will note in this story:

In a lot of stories, the butterflies in the tummy appear whenever they get humiliated.

I increase these butterflies activity to the point they get on little Harley Davidson's and ride like hellions through her stomach burning and pillaging.

At some point, those butterflies grow quiet though as she starts to accept the reality of her new life and when they wake up it's Butterfly Armegeddon. That's an example of how I was trying to be more descriptive rather than just say "I was nervous" or "I was REALLY apprehensive and nervous" about something. I do that too, but I try to use more descriptors as I polish up the chapters to post.

I also create art for this story, more in the start to establish the characters. As the story progresses, there won't be as many pictures.

It's important to me that the reader understand the rules of the Program. I published the entire set of rules. I summarize those rules later, and spent time in the orientation showing the reader how those rules are put into practice.

Later in the story, I do skip ahead a few weeks, and then a few months and such. I didn't feel the need to be descriptive about the actual birthing process because it's frankly very clinical and while there can be tension, I didn't write the actual delivery. I worked on the scene, but it felt very unfun to me to write, so I assumed it would be unfun to read.

However, I wrote the events leading up to it and after.

There are 75 chapters. I am not even 25% of the way complete. I obviously will spread out the events after the foundation is complete to tell the entire story.

I will just say two things to the trolls.

1. I do this for free. You get what you pay for. Please don't troll me with comments and emails denigrating the story. It's an instant block. I am not here to debate, or argue. If you cant be constructive, put your email in the garbage.

2. Don't do that to any authors here. You aren't making things better. You are making things worse.

If you can't write a story yourself, your contributions of "your story sucks" only add to a general level of toxicity that still plagues this site. You get what you pay for and if all you do is pay in toxic behavior, then expect same in return.

I've really enjoyed writing Call Me Misty. The final chapters are being edited now. I expect to post a new chapter tomorrow. I've added unique AI art to this story that you will only see on SOL. I created persistent characters and caption/edit them myself.

I try to enhance the story, rather than tell the story with the pictures. They say a picture is worth 1,000 words, and the first story is 187,808 words, and the second story is 84,102 with three more chapters remaining.

https://storiesonline.net/s/31449/call-me-misty

I split it into two parts, because I've found that readers seem to get overwhelmed with longer stories.

I don't understand that. To me, if a story is great, I fall in love with the characters and don't want it to end.

Lord of the Rings, Star Trek, all those stories live on because people love to hear about their journey.

I feel like it's time to end the story after I've told the most interesting part of their lives and shown how they evolved from the start of the story to the end.

In Call Me Misty 2, I also wanted to write about the connection between Ren Faire and BDSM. You'll often find people who are into both at Ren Faire and quite open about it. Leather is a common theme to both.

I included a few of my observations of raunchy behavior at those places. They are PG-13, sort of like an 80's movie. If you ever revisit National Lampoon's vacation (movie version) and think "my parents let me watch this?"

That's the same thing as a Ren Faire. The saying is "You only get the jokes you are supposed to get" but some of the costumes are pretty damned sexy. Especially the tight white bodices with big jugs on the girls that shake up the lemonade. They earn their 7 dollars.

In addition, I feel my NIS Breeder Program may be up there with some of my other favorites like Keeping the Babysitter in Line, and Do you have a big dick? Why not?

https://storiesonline.net/n/33623/nis-breeder-program

I have 75 chapters complete. I modified the NIS format to allow mothers to participate in the program voluntarily as breeders (As long as they are fertile). It's 2047 and population is on the decline, public nudity is legal, and sexual expression is much more tolerated in public.

You can't walk around sticking a dildo up your ass in the grocery store and not expect to get kicked out, but you won't get arrested if you leave. People have the right to be nude in public but in small town Little Rock Arkansas, its much more rare.

Except at the high schools, where they encourage it through the NIS programs. Any student or teacher is free ot be naked, but the NIS students get school credit and have specific mandates to educate and encourage body positivity/sexual positivity and not kink shame or slut shame.

I have also added some AI art to that, and I've got 12 chapters posted as of this writing, and another almost ready to post.

I am not sure what I'll write next. I have several unfinished stories to complete. I love getting reader feedback and suggestions. If you feel like dropping me a constructive note, that's appreciated.

This story is pretty much written, but I still love to hear thoughts and suggestions. I write for free. I'll never ask for money/donations or Patreon. I am not sure my writing is good enough for that anyway, but even if it was, I do this for two reasons.

1 - I like to live vicariously through the eyes of my characters and I get to do that when I write.

2- I LOVE to inspire other authors to give it a try. I write for the most selfish reason of all. I write stories that I would have LOVED to read. If I can inspire anyone to just sit down and write out their idea and post it on SOL, that's awesome.

Especially, if it's like one of my stories, or riffs off some of the characters I created. If you dig Hope and Misty from Call Me Misty, then feel free to write a fan fiction. You have my blessing and encouragement.

It would be quite flattering because it means I breathed enough life into the characters to make someone else fall in love with them the way that I did. They aren't iconic Captain Kirk or Gandalf, and I would never say they were. However, their adventures could continue!

If you never wrote before, just remember that EVERY author on this site had never written a story BEFORE they wrote their first one. We all sucked at it, and most of us have learned over time.

I cringe at some of my earliest stories. I didn't even have MS Word and no editors. I just wrote without spell check.

Now, I cringe at how many errors I find when I free write before I post. Do your best, and don't worry about it.

What I do, and the secret to writing (to me) is three critical things.

1. Pick a time in the character's life that was the most interesting time for them. Write about that.

2. Imagine you are sitting across from your buddy at the bar and telling him a story. If it starts with "No shit, so there we were" that's fine. Just write the story like it's happened and you are giving them the details.

3. Show don't tell. Many new writers "tell" by writing sort of a police report. "This happened, then this happened, then he said this, then that happened."

Don't write a long background, or a report. SHOW the reader what happened.

This is the hardest one of the three on this list to master, and I still work at it.

Instead of "He was nervous" (TELLING)

Describe his body language. "He kept looking at the door and shift his weight from one foot to the other. He couldn't stop fidgeting with his hands"

I've painted you a picture with words. You can see that he is nervous, right?

Don't worry if you can't do that every time. Work on it. Do it. Contribute to the body of work on SOL, and in time, people will start writing more stories you like.

I get inspired by other authors like MaryS, Badgerhole, ByDaSea, Vulgus and Mike McGifford.

I hope I write stories they would like to read. It's my way of paying them back, because money won't cut it.

(And I really don't have any to give, lol)

What began as a "Short Story" about a woman volunteering to help her daughter in a new NIS Program blossomed to 68 chapters. I've just finished writing them all, and now comes editing.

I just posted chapter 9 but I made a few edits if you have already read it. I added one new illustration. I make these with AI, so this is the only place they are available. I trained persistent characters so that I could produce repeatable pictures and consistent results.

I could really write it endlessly because there is no real end for the characters, just a continuation. I had a few arcs in the story that I felt tied together well and, 68 was a good place to end it.

I guess I could have shot for an even 69. There is more in store for Brittany Garner down the line in her life.

I turned on Comments on the story for the first time in years. They were always full of vitriol and nasty grams from non-contributors to the site who want to crap on stories. Someone proved to me today that it's still going on. I feel bad that comments are on by default and people still do that.

I love constructive comments, so if you have any feel free to drop some author feedback.

I am also finishing up on Call Me Misty 2. The next chapter should be up tomorrow at the latest.

So now what? I have some older projects I need to complete, and perhaps reset on. I might start something new and epic.