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Are there any "pregnant" in school stories full of milky tits and fat swollen bellies?

Today, I was inspired to write a short NIS story with that theme. Here is the basic idea:

"Mom, please?"

"Are you kidding me? Absolutely not, Heather!"

"What? Why not?"

"It's bad enough you want to volunteer for the nude in school program. Everyone will be looking at you and touching you, Heather!"

"So? I don't have anything that no one has ever seen before, and my friend Caity is doing it with me. The NIS program is to help teach body acceptance and normalize sexuality. We aren't doing anything that teenagers haven't done in schools across the country."

"You are going to get pregnant!"

"Okay, I'll admit that sounds extreme, but I could fuck my boyfriend and get pregnant on my own. If I do this, I will ensure a free ride, all tuition paid to State College, AND the program will pay me $30,000 to be a surrogate mother for a couple that WANTS to raise a baby."

"You could really give up the baby after you have it?"

"Do you want me to keep it?"

"No, but think of what a pregnancy will do your body at this age!"

"It's all perfectly natural, and it's bound to happen. I can't have perfect tits forever."

The story continues with her brother walking in and laughing about "perfect tits" after catching the end of the conversation. He tells his sister to go for it, and she sneers that he just wants to make perverted comments.

"It's immature guys like you who give the program a bad name, because instead of satisfying curiousity and educating yourselves, you use it to grope girls and gawk at us."

"Hey, I am a guy."

"Well, Heather, if you really want to do this, more than your brother will gawk at you. Are you really sure you want to be naked at school?"

"Yes! I already told Caity I would do it."

"You should have a normal senior year, Heather. Are you really going to prom, butt naked?"

"Why not? I won't be the only one there like that, and it's not like I have to be nude 24/7, just at school events."

The brother interjects again that she should not mind being nude all the time, because "it's just skin" and it's perfectly natural after all, and goads her into agreeing to it. (I don't know about that, just sort of brain storming.)

The story follows Heather and friend as they get pumped with semen in front of the class, and told for the next 90 days, they have to wear a covering over their pussies to ensure that they do not have sex with anyone else (since the donor of the sperm is putting up the 30k for the baby). They can do anal.

Then the story fast forwards to them doing pregnancy excercises, lactating in demonstrations and being examined by students to see the changes in their bodies.

"See how wide their nostrils have become? Their nipples have stretched and elongated, and their assholes are now much wider. Do either of you have hemeroids?"

"Gross, no!"

"It's a common side effect of pregnancy, and perfectly natural."

the story culminates with the girls in NIS giving birth together in front of the class, and potentially wanting to keep the baby after it is all over instead of turning it over for the pay out.

You may have heard of the concept of seven basic plots that ALL myths, sagas, fiction etc are based on.

The meta-plot to them all begins with the anticipation stage, in which the hero is called to the adventure to come. This is followed by a dream stage, in which the adventure begins, the hero has some success, and has an illusion of invincibility. However, this is then followed by a frustration stage, in which the hero has his first confrontation with the enemy, and the illusion of invincibility is lost. This worsens in the nightmare stage, which is the climax of the plot, where hope is apparently lost. Finally, in the resolution, the hero overcomes his burden against the odds.

All fiction that is written is a variation or combination of the following seven recipes.

any characters may appear in a story, its real concern is with just one: its hero. It is the one whose fate we identify with, as we see them gradually developing towards that state of self-realization which marks the end of the story. Ultimately it is in relation to this central figure that all other characters in a story take on their significance. What each of the other characters represents is really only some aspect of the inner state of the hero himself.

I break that rule all the time, but I think a good story definitely has an ensembale central cast. if I am reading Star Trek, I care about Kirk, Spock, Scotty etc, not just Kirk.

The seven plots are:

Overcoming the monster

Definition: The protagonist sets out to defeat an antagonistic force (often evil) that threatens the protagonist and/or protagonist's homeland.

Maybe the monster is a metaphor for a bully or your mother in law.

Rags to riches

Definition: The poor protagonist acquires power, wealth, and/or a mate, loses it all and gains it back, growing as a person as a result.

Maybe in erotic fiction, the son turns the tables on the mom and gets to take charge.

The quest

Definition: The protagonist and companions set out to acquire an important object or to get to a location. They face temptations and other obstacles along the way.

Voyage and return

Definition: The protagonist goes to a strange land and, after overcoming the threats it poses or learning important lessons unique to that location, returns with experience.

Comedy

Definition: Light and humorous character with a happy or cheerful ending; a dramatic work in which the central motif is the triumph over adverse circumstance, resulting in a successful or happy conclusion. Booker stresses that comedy is more than humor. It refers to a pattern where the conflict becomes more and more confusing, but is at last made plain in a single clarifying event. The majority of romance films fall into this category.

Tragedy

Definition: The protagonist is a hero with a major character flaw or great mistake which is ultimately their undoing. The protagonist's unfortunate end evokes pity at their folly and the fall of a fundamentally good character.

I tend to have comedy in my tragedy stories, so I am probably going to hell for that. Which, I am sure I will find amusing because all of the people that told me I would end up there will be there with me.


Rebirth

Definition: An event forces the main character to change their ways and often become a better individual.

Story like "Resetting my Bitch Button" would be a good example. She is unhappy with how she is, and the catalyst for that change is hitting rock bottom and deciding that discipline is going to provide a better outcome than status quo. She realizes it has to be a fairly dramatic change or she'll waste her time and revert to her old habits.

https://storiesonline.net/s/22921/resetting-my-bitch-button

I also read today The Rule of Three.The third event in a series of events becomes "the final trigger for something important to happen." This pattern appears in childhood stories, like Goldilocks and the Three Bears, Cinderella, and Little Red Riding Hood.

I am not sure if my stories have that concept, but I like it.

Would you agree with any of that? I feel like a lot of stories are often more like diaries of what occurs, filled with melodramatic interactions much like a soap opera. They do not have to go "anywhere" - Luke and Laura's wedding on General Hospital took most of my early childhood watching it on TV and it never seemed to have any real plot at all. I watched it on my grandparent's tv with my grandmother. It bored me shitless.

When I think about story "Tropes" versus the central core of the story - there are bully stories, hot neighbor stories, turn the tables, burn the bitch stories etc. There are stories with different settings ranging from space wars to modern times to victorian era and alternative universes where the rules of reality are different.

Yet, I tend to think that the seven basic plots provide some food for thought to what I should write next after I finish with Call Me Misty.

I have several unfinished stories that are sitting on my hard drive unedited and unpublished to work on next, but I think I'd like to push myself in a different direction for the next story.

ideas?

In other news, Lizards were inducted into the Hall of Mammals as top Mammal, and Lex Luthor was inducted into the Justice League as top Super Hero.

I love Kool and the Gang, but with them are Tribe Called Quest, and Mary J. Blige. Maybe it should be called "Music Hall of Fame" and we recognize their genre of music, instead of just lumping them all into something they definitely are not.

I get it that they all have common ancestors, but so do reptiles and mammals somewhere along the evolutionary ladder.

In other news, a new chapter of Call Me Misty is coming soon! Editing is a slog.

You know how when you watch a slasher flick or a Stephen King movie and they have to include that disclaimer.

"No actual pets were harmed in the filming of this movie" so people don't freak out and think they actually shot a dog?

It's just movie magic. When the slasher comes after the topless co-ed bimbo, it's not real. It's supposed to look real and make your pulse race but no actual sluts were harmed in the filming of the endless Jason movies.

I wanted to post a PSA along the same lines about my stories. A few months ago I came to the realization that the scores/votes or whatever you want to call it here are a sad joke that empower trolls and do more to discourage good writing than reward it.

More than a few fellow authors have told me something like "I didn't get very good scores, so I won't write more stories like that"

Given that so many trolls create multiple accounts to vote down stories that feature elements that they do not personally like, I feel like it's not an accurate representation.

There is a vocal majority of people who read the stories that never even bother to vote. If you look at a story with on average 1,200 views per chapter, with 200 votes TOTAL, you can assume that way more people read it and didn't vote.

They must have liked what they read because they came back to read more.

I don't limit my fetishes or characters in any way (outside of SOL/legal standards). If I feel something might happen in the story then it does. I believe in story codes, but I do not believe in censorship.

One of the big triggers to the trolls is to write a submissive male into a story. This sets them off (probably for a variety of subconscious reasons that I won't get into).

I do not give a fuck what triggers someone.

Not one.

It's just fiction, and none of this shit happened. If you can't handle a slasher chasing bimbos, or a cat coming back to life after it's been buried, then stay away from horror movies. If you can't handle a dude sucking a dick or a woman drinking her own pee or whatever weird shit that we write about - stay away from (my) erotic fiction because I'll probably write about it.

I can't believe it. So there I was, Mate. I had my dick in my hand, and I was about to proper whack off, when an 18 year old sheila knocked on me door. I don't normally write to Penthouse, but I had to tell you this remahrkable stawry..I am not just taking the piss. Her mum and her wanted to come in an' bawrrow a cup of sugar. I told her I didn't have any and I was having a wank, so she should fuck off back where she come from. Anyway, jerking off was a right bonzer. Do you have a coldie?


Have a Good One, Mate.

-An Erotic Short Story by Crocodile Davidson