Eddie Davidson: Blog

I started writing stories inspired by one I found on Aastr that inspired me to start writing.

It was fascinating because it was done entirely in dialogue. I've never seen that done well until I read this story. No action description but the reader is able to perfectly follow along.

The story begins with a father telling his teenage daughter to take her panties all the way down and prepare to be spanked. Naturally, she feels she is too old to be spanked this way but we get the impression this has happened plenty of times in the past.

There is a lot of humiliation and BDSM when the wife turns out to be a submissive. The neighbor boy comes over and says he thought he saw a woman with nipple peircings nude in the backyard.

The dad makes his wife come out and drop her robe "Now this is important, boy. Did the peircings look anything like these?"

Unfortunately, the story was never finished.

I decided rather than try to finish the story to do a series of short homages to it. Stories in the spirit of that initial tale that got me into writing.

I don't write in "dialogue" only though. I am not that good of a writer. I may give it a try one day but it is more traditional storytelling. I usually do 1st person from a single perspective to give the reader something to relate to in the telling of the tale.

Every now and then I do birds eye view third person as well.

Case in point (and why I am writing this blog today) is
"Keeping the womenfolk in line -Karen's Tale"

It was originally called "Your face would look good between my legs". However, I was never happy with that title. Now that I've added some chapters I renamed it. The link is located here;

https://storiesonline.net/s/22519/your-face-would-look

It tells the story of a woman and her son visiting her sister. They have travelled across the country and have no where else to go. Her sister earns her money working out of her trailer selling ass on the Internet. She lives with her two hot daughters, young son and husband. The family is just like any other all-american family. They love each other, have squabbles etc.

I hope you will enjoy it. The feedback has been "mostly positive".

One other notes: Thanks to my friends I am often able to go back and fix my mistakes. I don't have a regular editor to help me. If you see a grammar or consistency mistake in my chapter please let me know.

If they're not from America it's preferably like any other day.

However I was picturing a BDSM couple with a few kids and how they spend their normal daily lives. Maybe the wife is submissive in the father is the head of the household

What would 4th of July weekend be like for them?

Mundane and vanilla for some of it probably.

I could picture shooting off some bottle rocket sticking them up the wife's ass and firing them out side

It would make a great short story.

With Chapter Six I am turning on voting.

I wanted to create a story that was a little different than my norm - about a trashy family that lives in trailer park (okay, thats my norm) that involves (BDSM/Humiliation/incest) okay thats my norm.

Still - I think this set up and the pacing is very different than usual for me.

The story is about a stuck up prude and her son coming to live with her trashy sister who works as an escort. In this day and age, there are lots of women who live off Twitter and the Internet as sex workers. Betty is simply one of them. Her kids know, and they are fine with it, but they don't really get involved. They know guys show up and leave happy but that's about it.

I was hoping to paint a very realistic and plausible picture of the alternative lifestyle some families really do lead. I know a woman quite like Betty and she makes her living off webcam - and thats something her family just has to deal with/accept. It pays the bills very well.

I am curious now that chapter six is posted (scheduled to be posted anyway) that the story is turning a corner where you see things going and what you'd like to see yet.

I do have some other stories in the fire I need to continue as well - its just tough right now and will be slow during the summer months.

Many of us (me, anyway) would love to read some Father's Day themed stories this weekend.

In 2020 we have so much going wrong, it would just be fun to live vicariously through a Father's Day story on here.

Here are some random story starter thoughts:

How would a Father's Day work in a BDSM Household where the Father is the Dominant and the mother is the slave? Especially if she is not permitted to own anything?

How about if it was a Female Led Relationship, and the girls of the house run things, how would they treat Father's Day if Dad is the submissive house maid?

How about a Father's Day gift that is extra special or even super natural?

The go-to gift is a new Tie. What if it was about getting Tied up instead?

What if Daughter moved away and became a cam girl with a bunch of her freaky friends. Dad turns out to be a customer - daughter comes home to visit for Father's Day.

What about this idea: Dad has a fantasy about Hypnosis. His wife and daughter have read his browser history, its full of dirty stories. They agree to pretend to be hypnotized by him all weekend no matter what he asks as a gift. They make a bet that neither will chicken out - thinking he won't get too pervy they both do this as a way to give him the best father's day weekend ever.

How about a Vacation? The family takes an exotic trip and gets captured by some local sheriff and humiliated - turns out, it was an all inclusive roleplaying thing that the mom paid for.

Bad Dad - he is kind of a strict disciplinarian and his girls are always getting in trouble. Father's Day he wants them to be angels but they act like little devils. What's a dad to do?

How about just some kinky shit? I don't care - write.

If not for Vulgus - I would not be writing.

There is no doubt in my mind about that. His stories were such a huge turn on for me.

I didn't think I could write. I have terrible grammatical habits. I dabbled at it. Most of the initial feedback I received was terrible and quite discouraging.

If you sort my stories by earliest - you will probably agree. I didn't have MS word or any spellcheck. I was doing the best I could with what I had at the time.

I think the ideas were solid - Naked in the trailer park was my take on the "Naked in the School" stories - except rather than focus on school, I wanted to focus on what happened around the trailer park.

My first real solid story was "Do you have a big dick, why not?"

It was about a woman who did webcam shows with her daughters. There are real women out there who do that. It's not that uncommon really. They were trashy girls who had been raised with loose morals.

In the story, the titular line happens when one of the girls introduces a boy to her. She asks him if he has a big dick, money or cocaine - because if not - why is he even talking to her. He is wasting her time without at least one of those things.

The story will take you on some twists and turns.

The next big one for me was "HOA: Big Day in Sunny Manor" - B.D.S.M is what Big Day in Sunny Manor stands for. I should have titled it "Big Dick in Sunny Manor" now that I think on that - but no one in the story had a huge hog.

Anyway, the idea there was that this vanilla family moves to a kink-friendly community in Tampa. (These also exist). In this case, the parents are into BDSM. They sort of underestimate just how freaky this place is.

I thought that was a great premise for a story. This is perhaps my longest story yet. I really enjoyed writing it. I was channeling a couple of my favorite stories when I wrote it. The unfinished "HOA" by Mister Archie, some of Vulgus's stories that involve groups of kinky-friendly communities, etc.

I wrote a lot of side characters into that story. It was fun to sort of tease about this living community that had a rich background. The guy who worked for the community manager's sister was one of the pony girls in his stable. She used to be a hot cheerleader in college - she made more money working as a show pony than she ever would have as a profesional cheerleader (or a stripper) though.

Anyway, I've written more short stories since then - by short I mean around 8-12 chapters each. They aren't epics. I have a lot of ideas and very limited time to write.

My most recent story is based on one of the first stories by Vulgus I ever read. I fell in love with the characters. At the end, I was asking "Okay, so what happens NEXT?"

Which is the sign of a great story.

I asked Vulgus if he would permit me to continue Lori's journey. My version is taking a few twists that I hope Vulgus would approve of. Lori asks her brother to do it to her again. She can't stop thinking about the kinky shit she did with him.

Vulgus hinted about some of it involuntarily turned her on when it first happened. It was all there in the subtext.

The problem I have is that the first chapter has FOUR THOUSAND downloads.

Every other chapter has bumpkis downloads.

That tells me that the first chapter sucks.

There is a dream sequence in that first chapter - because I wanted to set the tone for how wild Lori's fantasies were. I took a chance there with how I set up that chapter. It doesn't seem to have paid off.

If people aren't intrigued enough to click "next chapter" then it means I lost them as a reader.

On the other hand, maybe they busted a nut and just like a porn video on Porntube - they closed the browser and never came back to it.

In any case, the subsequent chapters are better (IMHO) - just nobody reading them.

So my question to you - is should I cap this one around chapter 8 and call it standing in the shadow of a giant like Vulgus? I mean he is a tough act to follow.

I have other stories I could work on. I also have a few still unfnished. Keeping my Sister in Line definitely had some excitement around it - with 31 comments on a 12 chapter story.