Eddie Davidson: Blog

I have written a story called "Nehal" about a man from a small village in India.

It would be a blessing if someone who is from there could read it and provide feedback. I am posting up the first chapter soon after I finish editing it.

The story takes place in Gujart and I've used some native Gujarti words. I am hoping that I did so in proper context and the story reads like a person who isn't a native English speaker wrote it.

I also hope that it tittilates and amuses. If so I will continue it.

I am just joking with the title of the blog - however I think that may make for an interesting story.

I'd like to ask for feedback on my two recent stories. I can never get anyone to review my stories on this site. I think I am just not lucky/worthy of a review. I rely on feedback from readers and right now I don't get much.

Usually, if someone is going to write to me it is one of three things.

1. "Hey, you fucked up spelling (x) it should be (Y)".

I love that and appreciate it. I have no editor. My friend Mike McGifford takes the time out of his writing to help me as much as he can.

2. "Hey, (I Don't like stories about XYZ) and you (Write stories about XYZ) therefore I do not like you. Stop writing. I downbombed your story with a 1 vote from all my alts.

Or some version of snotgram like that.

3. I love your stories -please continue.

These are the most rare and still encouraging. However, they are not feedback. There is no "why" or specifics in there that helps me understand what I am doing well/doing poorly and what I should do differently. I feed off collaboration and ideas/suggestions.

I can't write Futa, Space Opera or historical fiction very well. If you are familiar with my stories most of them are set in trailer parks or middle America because I write the settings I know the best.

I concluded the short story "Naked in the Trailer Park" recently - and someone was kind enough to point out two of my possibly many spelling and grammatical errors. I use Grammarly and Word and re-read my work but it's often hard to spot my own mistakes. It all makes sense in my head and my mind inserts the correct punctuation. Meanwhile, I have the eyes of a hawk on someone else's work and catch their mistakes.

The feedback was mostly positive except for one troll. The voting was poor, the readership was poor. I am used to that. Stories about BDSM don't do as well on this site. It's still my favorite and only site.

The second story I am on "Resetting my bitch button" is an epic story about a woman who meets a man on the Internet and agrees to let him train her. It explores the concept of going on a 'vacation' with a BDSM flair to it - among other things.

It has a slow start.

I have 10 more chapters in the queue that I am still editing. The next stop is a nudist resort that features a private BDSM event off in the woods away from the "vanilla campers" - These are real things (Google Camp Crucible). This one in particular is focused on pony girls and pony boys.

I'd really love to get feedback on the pacing and character development - plausibility and overall interest in this story.

I have some other short stories I'd like to explore and while the voting is high (with the exception of one troll) I am still barely getting 800 views a chapter while other stories are getting 2-3K posted at the same time.

So that tells me - there is not that much interest in my stories.

I polished a short story that I've had in my back pocket for a while. There are six chapters in total. I have just posted the fourth. I also turned on voting now that you've had a taste. I do encourage you to read to the very end though!

If you are following Resetting my bitch button I need to make a correction.

Due to an error on my part I chose a round number "1,000 points" as the goal per week for the girls. I realized after doing some simple calculations this was much too low. The goal is 3,000 points (which is more like 3,000 dollars a week) and a much better explanation of what may have drawn Kim (Chastity) to start the process of training in the first place.

Despite low readership I am going to continue the story. Chapter 16 will be the "Start" of the main story - I'll create a new section called "VACATION" - which is my exploration of what a BDSM kink friendly family would do on vacation with some members being vanilla.

I really feel that is a fun storyline and one that I've never seen truly explored.

I have been working on a big story for a while.

I have written a few epic stories and they seemed to do well.

This one starts slow and as a result you can see that by chapter two readership dips to about 50% of the original chapter by the third chapter it's about 10%. That's not good. So it goes 3,000 reads on chapter one, 1500 on chapter two and about 400 or so on all subsequent chapters.

The story has three arcs.I had planned to seperate them with "Sections" and post it as one big story.

The first chapter describes a woman's decision to be trained in BDSM by a man she met on the Internet and hows she comes out to her family about her decision. To me, this is a fascinating topic.

The initial chapter I knew would not "Grab" people - I didn't want to do the flash foward 3 weeks then say "Now let me tell you how it all began" schtick.

It was intentional I began with her reasoning and how she started the introductions to her immediate family when he arrived.

(There is a twist in the middle of this section that I did not want to give away to the reader).

Section Two: Involves their trip to Florida. I have always wanted to tell a story about a BDSM-friendly family on a vacation trip.

Section Three: is once they get where they are going and how things go from there.

Considering readership is *LOW* for this story I have a few options:

1 - Cut bait now and write something else people will like.

2- Continue with one big story and fuck whoever doesn't like it/don't care if no one reads it.

3- Split them into three smaller stories of about a dozen chapters each.

Do you prefer serial stories of about 12 chapters or would you prefer it all in one?

If you've read "Resetting my bitch button" - should I just hang it up?

I have two more chapters almost ready to post. It concludes the initial section.