4 My Sister's Keeper by Onagerian Surmise


Description: How far would you go to preserve your family, in the face of life changing events? This is the story of a young man faced with that challenge, who fights to protect the family he still has.
Size: 81 KB ( ~ 15,360 words)
Type: Drama
Sex Contents: Minimal Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa

Review by Teloz   [other reviews by Teloz]

Reviewed: 2013-07-26


My Sister's Keeper is unique on SoL, the convoluted plot keeps you hanging until the last paragraph.

Onagerian Surmise is a true craftsman, the dialogue is crisp and realistic, the characters multidimensional and disturbingly human. I say disturbingly, because in this particular story, the main protagonist, whilst not being as mad as a bag of squirrels, is definitely delusional.

If you're looking for sex, or a cheap thrill, My Sister's Keeper is not for you. If you're looking for a gripping short story that grabs you viscerally, and draws you into a strange, altered reality, you won't be disappointed.

Technically, Onagerian Surmise' only failing, in this story and others, is his failure to guard against silly homophones, writing 'peak' instead of 'peek' is one example. Other than the odd typo, a failing we all suffer, that's the only real criticism I have.

My Sister's Keeper is a disturbing and enthralling story.

Read, and enjoy!

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10