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2 One Door Closed... by Onagerian Surmise

Author's Description:
It's the Friday after Thanksgiving. Mike returns to school after sharing Thanksgiving dinner at home with his family. It seems the holiday is really over, when he finds himself locked out of his room in the freshman dorm. Looks like he'll have to spend the night in his roommates' girlfriends' roommates' room again. (Runner Up, Golden Clitorides 2006 Short Story of the Year)
Size: 22 KB ( ~ 4,172 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Romantic, School

Review by Jean_DAmour   [other reviews by Jean_DAmour]

Reviewed: 2010-06-09

A marvelous little tale with a cute twist at the end. I appreciated the author's attention to the niceties of good writing mechanics so that nothing distracted from my enjoyment of the story.

I would like to see this author rework this story so that the conflict increases more smoothly and is not resolved quite so easily. This one thing would make a great story into an easy short-story award winner.

Many thanks to this author for the enjoyment I derived from his considerable effort.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10