Her Sweet Heady Scent by Ray1031


Description: It was their anniversary and they had to work. The dirtiest job in the place. Cleaning the Pit, a trash and slug dump in the deepest tunnels. His wife was on the catwalks lining the walls of the pit and he was working the floor when an explosion in another tunnel knocks him out and kills the power. Things get interesting then.
Size: 19 KB ( ~ 3,603 words)
Type:
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, Oral Sex, Petting, Cream Pie, Exhibitionism

Review by Vinnie Tesla   [other reviews by Vinnie Tesla]

Reviewed: 2002-06-10


We don't know too much about the setting. A man and his wife are both working in some sort of mine when an explosion kills the lights and temporarily destroys the man's hearing. As he searches for his wife in the dark, he talks to keep up his spirits in this disorienting crisis.

What does he talk about? Duh, sex. His narration as he gropes around for his wife, not knowing if she can hear him, or even if she's alive, are vivid, hot, and affectionate, while managing to sound like natural dialogue, a very impressive accomplishment. Further, Ray manages to keep the sexual tension and the narrative tension simultaneously high.

The ending is a bit of a let-down--it doesn't show the level of attention and outstanding craftmanship the rest of the story does. But if you want to see a masterpiece of balance between narrative, character, and sex, you can't afford to miss this story.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10