I would like to start by saying that I consider 'My Inheritance' a watershed story in the Mind Control sub-genre. It holds in MC a place equal to Aftermath in online erotica.
This is MC required reading for fans and writers; although writers should be wary as this story has a tendency to 'stamp' itself on your writing.
From lowest to highest:
Stroke Amount: 9
Two reasons for deducting a point:
1) Some readers, like myself, might thing E.Z. crossed the line in a couple of places, not enough to squick but to make you leary. For the most part, this is isolated by the separating of purpose among the female characters.
Remember where I wrote that this story stamps other writings, this is the first time I read such a clean separation of purpose, intent, and sexual preferences in female characters. It is a tool that new writers should learn to use so as to better manage their own hordes of 'kittens'.
2) As hot as the sex is, the story is THAT much better.
Story Plot: 10
I cannot say enough about an MC story with a limited tool, deals with the power corrupting the character, a great handling of relationships between characters, and it could go on forever here.
Technical Quality: 10
I've read the story several times and not been kicked by any errors. It's possible that my mind is glossing over mistakes but I doubt it.
Appeal to Reviewer: 10
MC was probably the first erotica sub-genre I went through; at the time My Inheritance hit the ball through my uprights and years later I'm still looking for a story to step up to plate.
Let me repeat myself, My Inheritance is required reading for MC fans.