Unintended Consequences by Banadin

Author's Description:
The unintended consequences of taking reader advice by a new author.
Size: 5 KB ( ~ 948 words)
Genre: Humor
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Humor

Review by Jetcrash747   [other reviews by Jetcrash747]

Reviewed: 2017-06-05


Having just finished reading 'Unintended Consequences' by 'Banadin' and realizing that this story needed to be reviewed. So without any further delay here is my review of 'Banadin's story 'Unintended Consequences'.

Overall the story has a engaging concept, what to do after retiring. Doing something keeping the mind active, he could take up golf, fishing or any number of other action. Stay seated he chose writing short stories. An exciting worthwhile skill to develop with tremendous feedback from the reading community.

Since the story is fiction and all his feedback happens within a few lines the story moves very quickly. After posting his first attempt and receiving feedback the tale takes off. What happens is funny and enjoyable, only I wouldn't wish it on my worst enemy. This story 'Unintended Consequences' by 'Banadin' is an excellent read well worth the few minutes it takes to read.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed: 2016-05-04


Pure sarcasm and humor make this short work worth the few minutes it takes to read. It helps put us critics/readers/reviewers in our place, and reminds us that an author's work is just that, his/her own. It is one thing to suggest corrections to grammar and punctuation or spelling, but another altogether to start messing with a story's plot.

As short as it was, it still gets an A (8) for plot and appeal, along with an A+ (9) for technical score.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 8