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HD VERSION: HOT MOM: UBER DRIVING SLUT -now with more Uber

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I started writing Hot Mom: Uber Driving Slut as a writing exercise.

My plan was simple: Write about a hot slut who drives Uber and gives guys hand jobs and sucks their cocks. I've seen women who do this, it trends on Twitter as #dirtyuber, sometimes it just means they'll drive to your house if you are local and suck you off.

It's a lot safer than walking the streets and you can pick and choose the guy in your OWN car and not his.

I wanted to give the main character (Melanie) a reason to do this other than she just thought it was a thrill. I didn't want my normal multi-chapter character build so I started with her in the midst of rough-sex and then using some flashbacks within that framework I tried to give the reasons she was the way she was.

The initial feedback was dismal to say the least.

However, I am glad I continued. I would tell myself "Okay, this is going to wrap up in 4 chapters", then I'd get to chapter 4 and say "There is more story to tell - let me do 5 chapters", now I have about 8 chapters almost ready to post and I still want to do a little more. The girls in this story are those gag-girls you see on sites like EvilAngel that want to throat as much cock and will snort jizz off a mirror just to post it on instagram for a laugh.
They seem to delight in any humiliating activity instead of being reluctant and semi-unwilling victims.I wanted to make them less 1 dimensional then sex-bags acting as life support for three holes and two boobs though.

I sometimes want reluctant and semi-unwilling victims in my stories. I especially enjoy the ones when one of them transitions from reluctant to finding some joy in their bimbofication. In this case, the story drips with that sentiment.

I cant' tell a story like that in 4 chapters. The later chapters are even hotter than the most one. I've been thinking about a BDSM wedding and I've never seen one of those done well in a story before. You know where the Groom walks the bride down the aisle on a leash and then they all buttfuck the bride for old-time sake at the reception? Something like that but with bitter ex-husbands who gnash their teeth while they see their ex-wife remarry and be happy for the first time surrendering all their dignity and authority to their new master?

I realized two things today though:
I can't keep writing the story unless I address those issues first:

1. I had edited this very fucking poorly. Despite using Word, Grammarly and the services of my good friend and fellow author Mike McGifford I had really screwed the pooch on this one (and not in a good way). The story was riddled with a mess of errors. There was a word "JAroosh" or something that I completely missed.

So I went back and sat down and read every chapter and painstakingly began to polish the turd. That's why I am calling it "HD" as in High Definition. I added more descriptions and details when I felt it was lacking and I corrected as many JaRoosh's I could find.

As a side note: I think now that I've decided a Jaroosh is that thin layer of skin between a woman's clit and the little cock head that looks like a penis head.

2. For a story titled "Uber Driving Slut" there was really not a lot of actual sex in a car with an Uber passenger. I've remedied that by adding a prologue to boost the Uber Sex by at least 100%. I also feel that it foreshadows the relationship between Melanie and Savannah.

This story is a true joy to write. My main regret is lacking the time and singular focus to write only this as I am also deeply in love with the HOA story and carefully editing it. I've also got this fantastic Slut Summer School story to finish and we've just gotten to the part where things are coming to a metaphorical head.

I ask that if you are a fan of any of my stories then you give it a read. If you see any standout grammatical errors (and I am not talking esoteric oxford comma stuff), I am talking full on "Hey, you forgot a word in this sentence" stuff that I found in the first version.

I try to write BDSM/Humiliation/sex stories with the twist of adding a little humor/real life/and make you think type stuff. I don't know if I pull that off but I do know that they make me horny.

If you've given it a read already and wouldn't mind one more go through that would be really peachy! Especially with the prologue added to the mix.

I've spent the better part of today trying to clean up my mess and add what I think is a delightful first chapter.

https://storiesonline.net/s/20972/the-hot-mom

NAKED IN SCHOOL: Equestrian Studies (A Request)

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I know some people think NIS (Naked in School) stories are improbable and over the top. A few definitely are.

Then you start reading about nude week at Berkeley college where students are encouraged to attend class and walk around campus butt naked and all the real situations. The kids these days have access to things i never would have thought about in my day. Their cell phones give them all sorts of ideas and if I could have taken pictures of some of the crazy shit I saw or did back then I would have.

They deal with issues of trans-gender, body-shaming, advanced sexuality that I could never have dreamt about. I was lucky to steal a glance at a glossy Playboy Magazine in my Uncle's bathroom. I thought women just had Pubes and nothing else because I never saw what was under them in those pictures. Now, they can see right up inside a woman's ass just by logging into Twitter and hash tagging it. Amateur porn is huge industry now.

So the NIS to me isn't that far removed from reality. Especially when they start to address those concerns with body positivity and removing "Slut shaming"

"Okay Class, Amanda here is acting like a slut. Are you allowed to shame her for that? No. we have zero tolerance"

I like when they start with the best intentions but naturally the person in the story is nervous, humiliated, and we get all that fun naked in public tension. Some people act like it's perfectly normal while others are shocked and dismayed, and others are pervy and stare at ass cheeks flapping while the girls bounce tennis balls back and forth or practice cheerleading in the buff.

I love it when the NIS program isn't just random or extroverts who want to show off (unless those aren't the main characters). Instead, there is some incentive:

"If you complete the program you get a full ride to the State University" or due to disciplinary problems. "We aren't saying you've done anything wrong Amanda. You were identified as being AT risk of teen pregnancy. We wanted to scare you straight. The NIS program will teach you that no PDA (personal displays of affection) are permitted in the halls. It will also make you less curious about what boys have or to seek their validation by dressing provactively"

"But I don't..."

"Sorry, your mom has already signed the permission slips"

"That bitch!" Amanda whispers under her breath. She thinks her mom did this to her because she flirted with her new step dad and the two of them are very competitive at home!

I also love it when they address signs of physical arousal. Naturally, those aren't allowed at all and lead to physical spanking to encourage the participants not to have inappropriate thoughts in school. Which we all know at that age, they would.

Getting hard nips/wet pussy, or a boner would lead to standing in the corner/spankings and ridicule. Possibly even being asked to masturbate in private to get it out of their system?

The stories I've written in this universe include two in a trailer park (That was the twist - it didn't happen at school but in a blue collar/working class trailer park). I also wrote one based on the TV show "The Goldsberg" because I thought that would be hot. It fizzled and few people seemed to enjoy it. I liked writing it though. I am not sure I could do a NIS story justice.

So recently I had this idea for a story but I don't feel I have the ability to do it justice. I am also finishing up on some stories of my own. I wanted to put it out there as a request and see what happens):

Imagine Dillmore Highschool has recently decided to be a pilot program for the NIS studies system. The University sends down two pretty Co-Eds to help implement it.The girls have spent the last three years in University attending class in the nude and are here to help set up the program with faculty, but also improve it.

Their suggestion is to focus the students in particular academic studies.

"Our first year, we walked to class naked, studied naked, and that was about it. It got us used to be the object of attention but it didn't teach us that much. That is why we propose some of the more advanced things we did in the following years at the University" one of the hot blonde sorority girls says at the first assembly.

"NIS candidates will select one of different courses of studies for each semester. Don't worry, you can apply to change if you don't enjoy it" they assure you.

Without telling them exactly what they include they list off the choices (these are a few suggestions/feel free to add/change)

Art:

Science:

Dance:

Audio/Visual:

JROTC:

Physical Education:

Rowing/Crew:

Equestrian Sports:

"Oh good, at least they didn't put sex ed on the list" Amanda sighs with relief. She's always liked Horses and Dillmore has an extensive stable next to the gym where they teach sport riding and polo. She picks that.

Naturally, as the author you can preview some of the other hapless participants who picked the other choices:

Art: The pretty girl and guy who chose this are modeling for an art class. They have to get in fairly close proximity of one another so naturally the guy has to beat off before class because boners are not allowed in class.

Amanda might find that chillingly sexual because the poses while it's supposed to be innocent "Pretend you are clearing her throat while she chokes" actually look very sexual.

Science: "Okay that's enough about physical anatomy.Our next chapter is on alternating current versus direct current. Thomas Edison performed this experiment on an Elephant. We are going to use a much milder and non-lethal dose to illustrate what it does when it when entering the body. Erica, come up here please and let me attach this electrode to you.. Don't worry, it will sting a little but it wont kill you...okay, everyone see how Erica's eyes are wide and she is spazzing out? yeah, stop laughing Billy..anyway, if you were to touch her other nipple, do you think the current would enter your body or you would be insulated? why don't you come up here and see. Do you have rubber boots on Billy?"

Amanda is very glad she isn't the subject of endless science experiements. She is concerned that the next chapter is disecting frogs!!

Dance:

"Pole Dancing is an exciting way to burn calories!" the two cheerleaders explain that there will be field trips as part of this program they are leading. The Dance team will also be performing nude dance in front of large audiences.

Amanda is glad she didn't pick that one as well. Her pervy little brother would love to watch her do her homework.

Audio/Visual:

Add a bunch of nerds with microphones and cameras running the class.

"ASMR" Auto Sensory Meridian Response, is an experience characterized by a static-like or tingling sensation on the skin that typically begins on the scalp and moves down the back of the neck and upper spine. It is often created by whispers or very soft sounds"

They begin by whispering into the girls ear to test her responses while video taping.

Later, they have her act out various skits as the love interest, or film the news for the school with her tits out, etc.

JROTC: The Military education program in the school. Their Ranger program hunts the girls/guys in the NIS in the woods behind the school. "Don't worry, these are just pellet guns at low power. They won't even break the skin!"

Physical Education: Deep-knee squats, and Yoga poses in the gym in front of all other students. I remember meeting the owner of a Nudist resort who explicitly told me he spared no expense on clay tennis courts because he loved to see knee-slappers (long titties) bouncing around the court.

Rowing/Crew: Swimming/diving naked is a good too, but can you imagine rowing naked with a bunch of guys?

"Stroke...stroke....stroke....Billy, stop stroking and stroke!"

I dunno, that's funny.

Equestrian Sports: Okay, so this is what amanda picked.

She assumes she'll have to ride naked and is already anticipating saddle sore ass/chapped pussy from the horse.

"Oh Good news," says the stable master she doesn't have to do that.

"No saddle? Ride bareback?" she asks.

"Hah, no, here put this bridle in your mouth" he trusses her as a BDSM pony girl with a tail in her ass, hoof-style boots, feathered head dress, bit and bridle and the other students steer her and the other girls/guys in the equestrian program around an obstacle course.

"It isn't about doing it fast. It's about doing it with precision and dignity. High steps, ladies! Bring those knees up" The University girls are very experienced as pony girls as well and take a special pride in seeing this tradition passed down at Dillmore.

"You'll be marching in the homecoming parade right out in front of the Band. The good news is because Dillmore is a pilot program for NIS it has picked up national attention and the news will be there from all three major networks.."

Chapter 15 Homeowner's association was still wrong

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Somehow I uploaded a cattywampus version of 15/16 of the story.

Thanks to the people who alerted me, and to Mike McGifford for helping me straighten it all out.

I believe it is correct now. My sincere apologies to those who were confused by the sequence of events going in the wrong order. A section of 16 was left at the end of 15 and that is pretty much what messed everything up.

If you have the time, I would ask that you start again from chapter 15.

Please let me know with feedback if it still looks wrong. The editing process can be difficult and when you do each chapter independently mistakes are bound to be made.

Ever wrote a chapter so good you didn't think you wrote it?

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I started on this site writing stories because there weren't enough stories like the ones I liked to read. I was hoping to inspire people and contribute to the community by offering some dirty stories of my own that people may like.

I've got to say some of my earliest work is pretty much garbage. I go back and look at my first Game of Thrones Story and my Fall From Heaven story and see how poor the story structure is and the grammar and I shiver a bit.

Almost no one bothered to read them. The premise was pretty bad. The first one was Sansa Stark in King's Landing being teased by Geoffery. The second was a Dark Elven Princess who is captured by Orcs and taught to be a slave in their underground caverns.

The next batch were mid-range stories. I like the story structure and the dialogue but I had no editor or feedback. I've always thought the TV show Reba was great for fan fiction. She is sort of redneckish and has a house full of girls and a hot MILF neighbor.
The story failed to gain any interest. Even now, when I see that it has 14 reads in story stats in a month I say "Wow, I am shocked!"

I wrote a couple "Naked in the Trailer Park" stories that are kind of precursors to Sunny Manor in a way. The rules of the park changed with new ownership but it wasn't supposed to be kink-friendly. The people that lived there were already there when the rules changed and the rules only changed for select people who failed to pay rent. I guess in that sense it is nothing like Sunny Manor (my current story). It was an homage to some stories I can't find on here any longer for whatever reason the author decided to pull them and I will respect that.

It was about that time I met another author who has been such a big help. I'd like to thank Mike McGifford for all his inspiration and help editing. I think without that I'd have given up.

I started to write bigger and better stories. The "Do you have a big dick, why not?" story was hot to me. A high school kid meets a shy girl at school but learns that she and her mom and sister do webcam shows at night. That was an exciting story but it needed an ending.

I carried it on a bit further from the main character's moms POV (no spoilers but there is a reason) and felt I had told her story as well.

I started to write about a situation that happened to me one Summer but I began to make it a little more like what I wished had happened. I called it Naked on Summer Vacation. The first in that series involved a strong willed Aunt who wasn't going to let me be a bratty, smart-mouthed, stick in the mud.
The second was Slut Summer School when her daughter and friends wrecked the house throwing a party and she wasn't going to let them continue being total bitches. I still haven't finished that story and intend to go back. I've got the next chapter in a rough draft format.

That being said I began to really crave two stories on here that have sat for a long time. They have amazing starts and no ending. Pinch Week and Homeowner's Association. I think this story I am doing now may be a fusion of both.

I just submitted Chapter 13. I have to say that as I re-read it before I posted it I didn't recognize my work. It was as if someone else wrote this. It was such a good chapter.

In retrospect (it would be a LOT of work to renumber everything) I would make Chapter 13 the FIRST chapter in the story and then say "Now let's rewind to two weeks ago back in Atlanta" because it really grabbed me.

Honestly, I would love to write nothing but chapters about what happened here. There was no gang bang, no ultimate torture chamber, nothing happens super intense. Yet, the dialogue and the power exchange between the characters really turned me on.

I usually write flawed characters who are liars, manipulators, bitches, cunts because when they get punished it feels a lot better to me. Some guys can enjoy a slut who really gets off on it too and I write those too.

What I do not usually write is a loving, submissive who surrenders herself not because it is a sacrifice but because she feels it is where she belongs and is thankful to do so.

It was refreshing to put her in the middle of this story.

If you havent' read HOA this is not a shameless plug. If you don't like bondage/humiliation and the themes I write about in my story codes you won't like this story no matter what.

However if you do like those themes and you haven't read HOA I'd ask you read chapter 13 first and then decide what you want to do.

Short Story Challenge: Homeowner's Association

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Would anyone consider writing a short story in the "Homeowner's Association" Universe I created for the story I am presently writing "Homeowner's Association: A Big Deal at Sunny Manor

The first 6 chapters describe the general rules, location, director etc.

It doesn't have to be Sunny Manor. You could create your own fictional clothing-optional/kink friendly community if you feel more comfortable. You could use whatever kinks work for you as well. If you don't like the way I tell try your own.

I am having more fun with the interaction and integration of a new family into the community than I am with just describing rough sex and bondage situations. Granted, I am doing a bit of both. However, just the interplay between the characters has been the most rewarding to write.

It could be a story about another family that moves there for the first time. It might be what happens on Halloween night (So many Slave Leia's going door to door) they don't call it trick or treat, it's just treat.

What about the backstory to one of the background characters? Fawn and Angelica? Bambi? Carlos and his sister Dancer?

It doesn't have have to be canon with my story. Feel free to make up the rules/people that work for your story.

I'd like to see a few if anything as inspiration.

 

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