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Today he is commenting on a retro porn he just watched.
"So the girl has no money? why did she order a pizza then?" and that pizza delivery guy is just gonna GIVE her an extra sausage pizza for sex? how does he stay in business? Doesn't he have other pizzas to deliver? They are gonna get cold...hang on, I've got 20 more minutes of screed to write."
Tune in next week when the guy who doesn't read story codes sees a Stop sign and drives straight on through.
I just posted up chapter 9 of "Tig Ol Bitties" a Mind Control Story.
The premise is two big bosomed sisters have both essentially dared their little brother to hypnotize them and implant suggestions.
I am not a fan of MC stories where the subjects are robo-zombies with no will and/or awareness of their behavior.
I tried to research hypnosis in this story, and go with the idea that street magic suggestion and hypnotherapy is very different.
If a hypnotist is doing it right, the idea is that you will simply not crave a cigarette and you will think you never wanted one in the first place.
You won't go "I am hypnotized, so I can't smoke" like Fonzarelli in Happy Days choking on an apology because he can't make one.
You will simply feel like smoking is disgusting and you have no interest in doing it.
How I approach the girls is they are unsure if the hypnotism is working. I want the reader to be unsure as well. (maybe it isn't! no spoilers) but IF it is, then I want them to be like "Well, he is hypnotizing me to do (This thing I enjoy) so obviously I will."
If someone hypnotized me to sit on my ass and watch porn all day, I'd be unsure if it was the hypnosis or something I was just doing anyway.
I also frequently include her trigger words in the dialogue and just hide them in plain sight. There is a reason behind why they were chosen. I know there are entire sites dedicated to mind control stories - and I am probably not entirely unique in how I chose to approach this story.
I'd be curious if anyone knows of similar ones (so that I can read them)?
Or how you might have approached a similar set up of two doubting sisters who are willing to be hypnotized but when their brother starts they start suggesting "Make her howl like a dog!" and the other is demanding "Make her show her tits on command" and the hapless hypnotherapist is only happy to oblige?
What would you do differently?
I got quite a bit of positive feedback on chapter one, but after that it's been all quiet.
I have 28 chapters in total of this story - so there is lots to cover.
A very dainty woman with a lovely ass, and a tight rack went to a car dealer.
While she was bending over to look at the tires of a nice shiny red corvette, she accidentally lets a huge fart rip.
She breaks wind right there at the car lot and is mortified. She hopes no one heard and prays the car salesman is nowhere around.
However, whenever you don't want a car salesman, one automatically pops up like a hard dick.
"Uh, how much is this corvette?" she asks nervously, completely humiliated and hoping he didn't notice.
"Ma'am, if you farted just looking at this car. You are going to shit when I tell you the price."
They fuck at the end.
-A short erotic story by Eddie Davidson
Sometimes I wonder if it would be fun to write a story about someone who doesn't read codes to the stories on Sol and then comments "this story sucks. It has cross-dressing in it. Im downvoting" when that was in the codes of the story
The first chapter of my new story would begin with him falling down a manhole because he saw the sign that said
"Warning manhole" but rather than
Go around as the code suggested, he stepped in it and of course died.
It would be a short story with a very happy ending.
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