Eddie Davidson: Blog

I used to write a chapter, edit it, and then post it up just as soon as I could finish it. I love reader feedback and sometimes someone would say something that would inspire me to twist the story in another direction.

Then I wrote myself into a hole on a few stories and wasn't happy with the direction of the story, and I ended up abandoning those stories. I have a lot of half-written stories that I never published.

I decided this year to write the ENTIRE story and then run it through a final edit before publishing it. I'd cut back on including illustrations so as not to overwhelm readers and make it my goal to post a chapter a day.

I completed Tig Ol Bitties, a Mind Control Story. Itty Bitty Titty Committee (parts one and two!) and My Sons Dared Me.

I was so excited that I thought I'd post them in rotation. My publishing speed was faster than a lot of other authors who post infrequently, and I thought I was doing folks a favor offering them three flavors of perversion.

However, the minimal feedback suggests I should not have done that. I'll focus on one from now on after I get these published.

My Sons Dared me has one more chapter after the one posting today, so I'll finish that up. It was a LOT of fun to write that one. Not a lot of readers, which is disappointing. I really tried to do something different than many of my stories.

Itty Bitty Titty has 17 chapters, so I'll post that up primarily going forward. It's also one of my different stories. Every two or three days I'll post another Tig Ol Bitties as that has 28 chapters in total. Just be patient with me on that. Editing is the slowest part of the process.

I recently discovered a new tool that helps me identify some of my mistakes in writing, so I expect that to help with readability quite a bit.

Itty Bitty Part Two will be a longer story when they get back home as told by Katie's brother. It delves into more of my familiar stories.

I have another story finished called "Daredevil Mom" that is an American version of Joy from my Sons Dared Me, but QUITE a bit different.

I should also let you know that due to the holiday next week I probably won't be able to post for a few days, but I'll do my best on Saturday to post up one of each of the current stories.

Again, apologies - I really wanted to just offer more stories to people who enjoyed them and not frustrate anyone with slower posting.

Wow.

Today, I got TWO nice emails from different readers commenting on different stories.

It's unexpected and appreciated. It was not just blowing smoke either.

In one case, if I had a book jacket for "My Sons Dared Me" this would go on the back.

"The details about the places, the people, and manners of speech makes it feel as if I’m right there with Timothy. I look forward to the next chapter."

This was great. I set the story in Surrey and I am not from England. I've been asking British people to help me and doing my own research but I was worried I wouldn't be able to do it justice. It's very encouraging to see that my exact goal was realized by someone. I always want the reader to feel like they are looking out of the main character's eyes or right there over his shoulder.

The second nice thing was related to Tig Ol Bitties. I had some really positive feedback at first but it's gone quiet.

Today, someone took time out of their day to send me this:

In my opinion this is one of your best stories I like the elements of knowing and not knowing they are hypnotised, I hope at some point the Mum also gets or is already hypnotised and being used by Scott, I would like to read Scott has more sex with his sisters and mother, but I have no complaints and like this so far and thanks for all your time and effort you have put in to your writing for me one of your many fans
cheers


I was worried that with such a long story the pacing might bore people. I wanted to keep inching things up, like a stripper taking off her bra, then her panties, then her thong until she bares all.

The last thing the stripper wants is for you to be pulling the label off your Heineken as you check your watch and think about some place else you want to be simply because she is dancing to Meatloaf's 17 minute version of some song on stage as her first song and you are still waiting to see a little booby.

The reason this means so much to me is that I am aware of how toxic the Internet and some even on the SOL Community can be.

It's reassuring to see people send a thoughtful note that isn't just "Hey, good job" but genuinely points out what they liked about it.

I am fine with constructive feedback that tells me how it can be better etc. I don't want anyone to stroke my ego if it's not true either.

But damn, it feels good to hear two people think something that I am doing took them on a journey and made them feel something/think something.

I wanted to thank them, and encourage you if you are reading - to maybe drop a little note like that to your favorite author for the effort they are putting in.

Most of us get nasty grams from snotty trolls and they erode our faith in humanity in general. I know I've seen two authors recently pull up stakes simply because the negativity drove them away.

Let's build each other up, let's support each other. You don't have to like what I write about to do that. Let's just build the community, because what I write about might appeal to someone else who will use the site and help suport it as an author or paying member.

I know it's easy to say 'support each other' - now let's actually do it.

Am I the best? no. Am I trying to be? also no.

I forgot to post up yesterday. I got distracted because I had this epiphany for a story and I wrote all seven chapters. It's about a British mum that likes to do naughty dares her sons give her.

I began with a picture of what is an unmistakably British woman. There is something about British women in their body language, carriage and general demeanor that just makes them look "British".

She looks like what I imagine Samantha Fox looks like now, short reddish black hair, big tits, big butt, kind of frumpy. She was trying to ride a bike and her knickers were showing.

The caption was basically "Muh Son dared me to ride his bike up to the petrol station. What chance do I have? I can't even get out of the garden."

I could HEAR that accent in my head and as an anglophile I was sucked into her world. I crafted a story to play with the idea of Her big bottom sticking out under the negligee he chose for her and answer questions like - why did she start doing dares he gave her? Why knickers at all?

I am an American. I don't know how to write proper British accents. I set this in Surrey and had the mum and her sister originally live in the North East. That allowed me to make an excuse why their accents are probably a bit of a mixed bag. I also mentioned that they watch a lot of reality TV like Geordi Shore and naked attraction where they might pick it up.

I picked a small village in Surrey - South Godstone. It's a nothing place really. I wanted to imagine that most of the residents were familiar with her - seen her doing little dares around the village and while it's a bit of a local scandal - she is relatively harmless and most people tolerate her.

The constables up in Godstone proper are well aware of her and when they get a complaint, they assume it's being exaggerated again and they don't drive all the way down there just to tell her to wear a longer skirt.

As I often do when I write though - I began to make the story more than just a funny mum doing little dares. I built some characters and back story. Which I love, but I really was trying to do some mindless stroke writing.

If you like my stuff, you'll probably enjoy it when I start posting up the chapters. I am editing now and the first chapter should be up soon. I've got three others I am working on so I'll cycle them until I get the whole thing posted (7 chapters).

Here is what I ask: If you are English, please, please send me private feedback if you see something that isn't proper.

I researched Vimto soda, and Chip Butties. I researched the local area. I discovered that regionally the meals are very different and went with breakfast, dinner (lunch), tea (3pm) and supper as a standard. However, as I understand it Surrey may be different. It was a massive undertaking to wrap my brain around thinking of dinner as anything but the last meal of the day.

I mentioned pop music like McFly and Pixie Lott on her daughter's wall, did all sorts of stuff to try to make it feel authentic - but I probably got the details wrong. If I do - forgive and help me out with some corrections? what chapter and what I should have said instead?

I am trying to be a better writer, trying to write engaging stuff people enjoy. I can do that with constructive feedback. If not, it's just an echo chamber in here.

The better I get - the better my stories will be.

Today he is commenting on a retro porn he just watched.

"So the girl has no money? why did she order a pizza then?" and that pizza delivery guy is just gonna GIVE her an extra sausage pizza for sex? how does he stay in business? Doesn't he have other pizzas to deliver? They are gonna get cold...hang on, I've got 20 more minutes of screed to write."

Tune in next week when the guy who doesn't read story codes sees a Stop sign and drives straight on through.

I just posted up chapter 9 of "Tig Ol Bitties" a Mind Control Story.

The premise is two big bosomed sisters have both essentially dared their little brother to hypnotize them and implant suggestions.

I am not a fan of MC stories where the subjects are robo-zombies with no will and/or awareness of their behavior.

I tried to research hypnosis in this story, and go with the idea that street magic suggestion and hypnotherapy is very different.

If a hypnotist is doing it right, the idea is that you will simply not crave a cigarette and you will think you never wanted one in the first place.

You won't go "I am hypnotized, so I can't smoke" like Fonzarelli in Happy Days choking on an apology because he can't make one.

You will simply feel like smoking is disgusting and you have no interest in doing it.

How I approach the girls is they are unsure if the hypnotism is working. I want the reader to be unsure as well. (maybe it isn't! no spoilers) but IF it is, then I want them to be like "Well, he is hypnotizing me to do (This thing I enjoy) so obviously I will."

If someone hypnotized me to sit on my ass and watch porn all day, I'd be unsure if it was the hypnosis or something I was just doing anyway.

I also frequently include her trigger words in the dialogue and just hide them in plain sight. There is a reason behind why they were chosen. I know there are entire sites dedicated to mind control stories - and I am probably not entirely unique in how I chose to approach this story.

I'd be curious if anyone knows of similar ones (so that I can read them)?

Or how you might have approached a similar set up of two doubting sisters who are willing to be hypnotized but when their brother starts they start suggesting "Make her howl like a dog!" and the other is demanding "Make her show her tits on command" and the hapless hypnotherapist is only happy to oblige?

What would you do differently?

I got quite a bit of positive feedback on chapter one, but after that it's been all quiet.

I have 28 chapters in total of this story - so there is lots to cover.