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I have often asked for an editor on this site. The editor job probably sounds like a lot of thankless work to most people.
The role is often confused with being a proofreader which I definitely need as well. I have a friend who doesn't really enjoy my stories that has painstakingly helped me with that for quite some time.
I use Ms word, grammarly and other tools, and even with frequent rereading of my story, I often miss mistakes that I would catch in anybody else's writing because I know what it's supposed to say.
The role of editor is often confused with being a muse and a source of inspiration. That's a pretty lofty job and very difficult shoes to fill.
There are a couple authors on here that I stay in touch with that often inspire me with their work. I try to read as much as I write as a rule of thumb. There isn't enough stories that really float my boat and flick my bik to maintain that ratio though.
What I'm looking for is someone who actually enjoys my stories, that wants to read the early drafts and provide some constructive feedback. I don't use external email. I use the email through here and I would just paste it to you.
I'm not looking for exhaustive proofreading and I don't expect a lot.
I also can't promise that I can deliver new material all the time. I will write as much as possible with the time I have left on this planet. I don't have a schedule though and I don't do this for money.
if this intrigues you at all, I would ask that you also make sure that you've read at least three of my stories and like the themes before you respond. I try to post a lot of different stories but there are definitely some recurring themes
I'm looking for story direction and plot holes, ideas and suggestions to make the writing a little more fluid and intriguing.
In exchange, you get to read some of the ideas that I might never even publish. I have dozens of stories that are half complete that have not been published here. I am trying to write an entire story before I start publishing it because I have made the mistake of not finishing some first.
You would also get an advanced copy of the story before I publish it but by the time you read it I might have already posted it. you could still provide feedback because I am the type to go back and fix things.
if you are an existing author and you enjoy my writing, I'm all about co-collaboration and helping you in the same spirit.
if you are somebody who has never written but you have lots of dirty ideas, you are especially welcome to contact me. I was once exactly where you are. I used to read stories and think I had some pretty good ideas but I did not have the confidence or drive to tell my stories.
I'm glad I got over that because now I get to live them through writing them and sharing them and it's not as hard as I thought it would be. It is still work and it can be frustrating but it's all worth it. I can maybe help you get started writing and give you some feedback and pointers.
I tried to pass on some of the things I have been taught over the years about storytelling. There was an author who sadly passed away named Ernest Bywater that inspired me. There have been authors like Vulgus and Mike McGifford who inspire me just through their work. I try to give back in the same ways and help aspiring authors.
Constructive feedback is a gift, and it can not only encourage but it can improve the story so that everybody benefits.
I decided to delete;
Fall From Grace 2: the Confession of Abigail Parrish
Game of Thrones: How I Wish the Series Had Ended
A Little Humiliation Never Hurt Anyone, Love
The Parrish story, I may repost with illustrations. I am not sure. It's a historical Civil War era story.
The Game of Thrones -it never seemed very popular. Shortly after S8, I wrote what I thought should have happened. This was before I even knew that the two show runners were basically coked out Hollywood Dbags that were high on the smell of their own farts.
The new story isn't doing very well - not sure why. I will finish it and may repost. I suspect it has to do with my favorite trolls and their many accounts. It's been edited very well, has good illustrations, etc. It was a fun story to write but for whatever reason I will eliminate it.
I may redo some of my classics as well.
https://www.storiesonline.net/s/20017/do-you-have-a-big-dick
Do you have a big dick, why not? Is about a guy who meets a shy girl, and finds out her mother and sister (and her) do cam shows - but a whole lot more.
When I published this, I didn't own MS word and do AI images. I may polish it and republish it with new content. It seems beloved but unpopular overall.
Periodically, I think I will prune out some of my stories.
If you are a Vulgus fan and looking for something of mine that I am proud of - this was one of my earliest stories and I really enjoyed writing it. It needs some TLC under the hood though in terms of editing and elaboration.
If you've never watched this bloody brilliant show featuring Sheridan Smith - here is an example;
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pXyliE2IDQI
It would never fly in America. It was smart, and sassy and British people often have very sexual jokes/innuendo in their humor that Americans aren't ready to process and may not even find funny.
We watch shit like Friends and Roseanne.
They watch shit where people judge each other's cocks and cunnies and decide to vote them solely based on who has the biggest, or a show where two kids go up the ice cream lady and say "Show us your fanny, then?" and after she does - their minds are blown.
I'm an Anglophile and I've loved that saucy sense of humor going back to the days of Benny Hill - little titty tarts on his show in nurse costumes with lots of mascara getting groped by a little old man while Benny slaps the back of his head - that's entertainment.
I've written only a few stories set in Brittain, and my most recent one is largely influenced by the sensibilities of Two Pints of Lager and a Packet of Crisps.
I wanted to write a Sheridan Smith style character - the kind of cheeky mum you might meet in a pub that would "show her tits for a laugh" but make some self-deprecating joke about being a fat cow -when she's actually quite cute - probably has a gap in her teeth, bleached blonde hair, blue eyes - hairy quim, and all that.
https://storiesonline.net/n/30865/a-little-humiliation-never-hurt
It's called A Little Humiliation Never Hurt Anyone, Love
It's what I would consider a classic CMNF (Clothed Male/Nude female) or Embaressed Nude Female (ENF) story. The mum gets off on being snapped but even she can be embarrassed - it's just the bar is higher for her than it is her daughters- and on some level, she likes being red-faced and red arsed.
A cheeky British mum had decided that she and her daughters are going to allow her son to take "nudie snaps" (pictures) today. She insists they get their kits off and grin and bear at - at first for an hour but she enjoys the attention and the pictures so much that it stretches for much longer.
I would ask a kindly Brit to give it a read and let me know if I've made any mistakes. I have a few edits in the hopper to chapter 4 and 5 (including the pictures) that should be posted up in a few hours - hopefully by the time you read this they will be made.
The backstory of the main character is that she is from the North but lives in Surrey, so that gives me a little license to mix and match accents and cultural distinctions somewhat.
I wrote another story "My Sons Dared Me" - and it was a bit rough for me - even a pack of hot dogs comes in a different number than here in America. The concept of supper, dinner and lunch are very different regionally and possibly even depending on whether it's Sunday or not (for some reason).
Even what the British consider "relish" is completely different. It's basically Ketchup from what I gathered, and here in America, we'd usually think you mean pickle relish/sweet relish.
I had someone point out that they wouldn't say Lagersham Road, they'd say Lagersham.
I live some place where we do things like name a street Central Avenue and it may turn into Cherry Road, which then turns back into Central Avenue, unless you are going the other way, and then it's Cherry Avenue.
They said I wrote about British people "The way Hollywood writers create dialogue for Hugh Grant to say in movies," which wasn't all that bad. This time around, I used Chatgpt to help me research actual dialogue whenever possible.
It's a fun little story, and I am not obsessed with authenticity. It's okay if I take some poetic license. It's not like I am writing Robin Hood or something and casting Kevin Costner to talk in his American accent. However, if you can give the story a once over and let me know if you like it - I'd appreciate it.
It's not as dirty/filthy as many of my stories. It's more playful, and there is no real pain/bondage like most of them - at least not yet. I wanted to create a dirty little romp.
If you aren't interested in my story, I still recommend Two Pints of Lager and a Packet of Crisps. It makes me envious that I don't live there.
https://storiesonline.net/n/41830/twats-the-night-before-christmas
Right before Christmas, I started what I intended to be a "short story". I wanted something light for the Holiday Season.
I started with a simple premise:
What if your parents held a sex party every year on Christmas Eve and you were not invited/had no idea?
I decided that the protagonist Nick had just turned 18 and he was desperate to find out what the hub-bub was about. He had been told all of his life that he had to spend the night elsewhere and now his older sister was invited and he wasn't. He sneaks into the party and finds out much more than he bargained for.
I thought I could tell that in two or three chapters.
Reasons I could not do that:
*** I can never seem to tell a short story, I should have known that I'd have to do at least eight chapters.
*** I have always had a crush on Morgan Fairchild, and for this story I imagined that the protagonists mom looked just like her - and since one Morgan Fairchild is good, two would be better. I made her a twin and invited his Aunt to the party.
*** Initially, I wrote my own alter ego into the party as a background character. This Eddie is very much like me in real life, except he's married to a woman with a high sex drive that looks like Morgan Fairchild - lucky bastard!
It was hard to walk away from that character without adding more and more.
Initially, I wanted some spanking and kissing games, some naughty Christmas carols, and a whole lot of fucking and booze.
However, it took a lot more to do that justice than I could write in a few chapters and tell the story that I wanted to tell.
WHAT HAPPENED:
I had every intention to finish before the New Year. I even had an idea for a "NUDE YEARS EVE" sequel where Mrs. Sanderson and her daughter are invited back, and now Nick is their date.
Trolls told me my stories sucked, I had some personal setbacks in real life that kicked my ass, lost 23 pounds in about a month due to health issues, and my interest in fun stories about Christmas fizzled out.
I put the story on the shelf until I could do it justice. I didn't want to force an ending because I know those can be sucky.
Writing stories is a lot like flying planes. The hardest parts are getting it off the ground and then landing the plane. Once you have it up in the air - it's easy to maintain but putting a satisfying ending and finding the right place to stop is really difficult.
I've slapped endings on stories before and I didn't want to do that. I had the final chapters on my hard drive for a long time - but they weren't the story I wanted to tell and I wasn't sure where I wanted to end. I could literally tell this families story for a long time now that the secret is out and his parents do not have to hide it..
I made SEVEN pictures for this final chapter. I usually only make about three per chapter at most, and that's rare. There were just so many memorable scenes in this final chapter that I had to include them. It was hard to decide to cut a few - I may even post a gallery chapter in the future with some of the pictures that never made the cut. I have DOZENS - from girls being dunked in vats of Egg nog, to pissing their names in the snow while freezing their cute fat asses off!
The final chapter should be posted up soon. I wanted to apologize to those of you who have waited for the ending of this story in advance for making you wait. I didn't mean to pull a George R. R. Martin on you.
I wrote a few other stories to get my groove back, and even a prequel to this one that explains how Harley became aware that she's a kinky little slut like her mother and Aunt and likes rough sex/bondage.
https://storiesonline.net/n/45708/uncle-eddie-is-full-of-shit
It's called "Uncle Eddie is Full of Shit" with my alter-ego as star of the show, lol.
It could have been an April Fool's story but because it used existing characters from another story - it couldn't be in the contest. I doubt I would have won. I seldom even get nominated for things, much less win. The idea was she was bored in South Georgia on a hunting trip with her Aunt and Uncle - and she ends up getting hunted after an April Fool's joke goes wrong.
My plans:
There are a few other stories that have sat for a while and need some TLC.
https://storiesonline.net/n/43683/girl-scout-cookies-by-eddie
This is a story I began in the "Girls don't need modesty" world - I have several chapters written and unedited. I just need to work on this. It's a fun little story about an alternate world where equal rights never got passed, and women's suffrage failed, so women are treated pretty much like they were from the 1960s and earlier in the modern age.
Here Girls are taught to be obedient in the girl's scouts and they just accept this is the way things are.
https://storiesonline.net/n/30865/a-little-humiliation-never-hurt
This is probably going to be the one I work on the most in the immediate future. this will likely be 8 or 9 chapters in length.
The general idea here is that I wanted to write a sassy, busty, British Mum with a face like Sheridan Smith from two pints and a packet of crisps. I wanted that sort of cheeky British humor from the show to be in the story. They often make jokes that would never be permitted in the United States like "wanking on the curtains" and the guy says "Yeah, what do you expect me to do? wipe it in your hair when I am done?"
I love it when they say things like "What a cheeky little monkey?"
I did a ton of research for this one, and while I am not from Brittain - I think I did a fairly decent job. The story is set in Surrey, but I point out that the mum comes from the North, so that's why her accent will have a mixture of styles.
Her son convinces her to take some "nudie snaps" - which has always been a fantasy of hers since she was young. She insists her daughters do it with her "for just one hour, what else ya got to do around here? certainly not clean."
And that turns to a few hours, and then most of the day, and then the following day, etc.
https://storiesonline.net/n/45334/mom-s-rectal-thermometer
This one has at least one more chapter to share. Hooked6 (A famous old school CMNF author) convinced me to continue it. It's set in the 1970s when many mom's really would stick a thermometer up your ass and act like it was no big deal. The story has transformed into more than that though - so I should probably rename it.
https://storiesonline.net/n/36875/the-new-foal-a-pony-girl-story
This is the one I really want to work on but I need to be in the right mindset. A married couple have a long standing BDSM 24/7 relationship that centers around pony girl training. if you dont' know what it is - it's a fun thing to check out.
When I saw it for the first time, I thought it was just silly roleplaying in leather and didn't get it. However, once you actually engage in it - you see it for what it is. Sex is more of a byproduct or side effect. It has to do more with obedience, patience, submission and hard work than many other fetishes out there. There is an entire lifestyle/people who visit camps and engage in pony girl competitions.
This family does that and now the daughter is 18 and wants to be trained. The dad is reluctant but realizes she's hot and motivated and could easily find some guy who would probably not know what he is doing if she really wanted to try it out. The story is going to be MANY chapters, and I was stuck on "Battle Pony training" which was a specific competitive form of training when I stopped writing and put it aside last year (for same reasons).
Lastly, Visiting Aunt Scarlet - the literal red-headed stepchild of my many stories on this site.
https://storiesonline.net/s/23522/visiting-aunt-scarlet
The history here is that Mike McGifford wrote the first couple of chapters and then threw it away. I edited it and decided to continue it (with his permission) and have 18 chapters. I was just starting to learn AI art with this one - and so it's well illustrated. Aunt Scarlet just so happens (by coincidence, don't ya know) to look just like Scarlett Johansson.
The reason so many of my stories have characters that look like famous people is that you can more readily make consistent characters if you use recognizable faces for the LORA. There wasn't as many tools when I first began as well. Think of it like I chose an actress, the same you would be able to separate her from one of the many characters she plays in different movies. Her daughter and sister aren't based on famous people and I struggled to keep them consistent.
This story is actually almost entirely written, and there are about 35 chapters without an ending. I literally just need to edit and illustrate and then write the ending (land the plane). My only excuse here is lack of time and focus on this one.
This story is also third person - which is weird for me. I like to write first person past tense like the story teller is telling you what happened. That puts me in their head and lets me see through their eyes. It's a little more difficult for me to write third person.
I also feel like the direction of the story was such that it could be endless. The basic premise is that the shy, nerdy guy and his mom have no where else to go except Aunt Scarlet's house. His mom just had a divorce, no job, and even her car is broke down.
Aunt Scarlet is not only a natural submissive to her hubby, but a prostitute and works out of her home (like MANY women do in real life). Easy money, and at first, the main character's mom wants nothing to do with it. She is bookish and terse - but when a guy with a foot fetish and a wad of cash makes her an offer for something as simple as giving her a foot massage - she bites from the forbidden apple and before long she's working with her sister.
The subplot is that the attractive cousin is a bully, and she is humiliating the main character when the others aren't around - so you just know her comeuppance is due, and that part of the story would add a whole new fourth act/leg to the story.
In addition, I have dozens of other half-finished stories in various states on my hard drive that I'd love to write. However, I need to put endings on these and so that's a priority. I may post some others over the next few months but the ones above are my priority.
I don't know if you follow HBO's The last of Us or play the video game.
in my opinion, it's strong storytelling and great characters. it's an end of the world story, but it's more than that because it's about love and redemption and vengeance and universal themes.
I think it's often compared to walking Dead and that's a fair comparison.. they both elevate the genre but in my opinion, this one does things better on a lot of levels.
it focuses on only a few people.
two in particular are Joel and Ellie
it's not a spoiler if you watch or play the video games, but quick warning. I'm about to spoil it for you if you don't know...Joel dies
it's a pivotal and traumatic moment in the story. I identify in a lot of ways with Joel. in many ways, without him I have lost some interest in the story
however, I can't deny that it's a good story. it's a well-written story. it's a well-told story. it's a well-presented story in the context of how it is visualized in the game and in the TV series.
and yet it got 51% on rotten tomatoes.
Think about that. 51%? That's a 5.1 here at Sol. is it a 5.1?
is it just average?
is it mediocre? absolutely not.
what has happened is some "bros" do the same thing they do here..
They don't like some of the lesbian and gayelements and the more progressive ways in the story, and so they lash out at it with review bombs.
it's The last resort of a small and powerless little man who has no actual effect on the real world. they are trying to review bomb a show that is largely beloved and has already proven that it is a good story.
What do you think they get out of it? do they "win"? are they convincing anybody to actually not watch the show?
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