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Chuck and Lisa get back to all of the fun they enjoy best. This time they begin including others in their fun. Lisa is gathering and the Fab Five is helping. Just enough action and blood to keep it interesting. Enough sex, to be not recommended for Sunday school reading. Enjoy. I did. If you're not familiar with the Florida Friends stories, this will still be fun but the other stories are fun too.
Size: 3213 KB (636,287 words)
Genre: Action/Adventure
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Extra Sensory Perception

Review by Bud Ugly   [other reviews by Bud Ugly]

Reviewed:


The Florida Friends series is really one long, rambling novel. All the stories are interrelated, and the characters appear in multiple books. The latest is "Chuck and Lisa", though it's far more Chuck than it is Lisa.

Chuck is superman: he is a disabled vet, an amputee who's still a martial arts master. He's also a weapons master and an expert sniper. He's tops in strategy and tactics. He has 15+ women, and he can satisfy 15 of them in one night. He has King Midas' touch when it comes to business: everything he touches turns to gold. He's a world-class musician and composer, covering multiple genres. Oh, and he's clairvoyant: he can tell what number is going to come up on the roulette wheel before it happens (and uses that to make himself very rich), and he can communicate with other members of his family telepathically.

And that's the major problem I have with "Chuck and Lisa." Yes, it's fiction, but it's too far over the top, past absurd and all the way to silly. One or two or maybe three of these talents would be enough to make a good story; all of them is piling on, and the reader is asked to suspend disbelief far too much.

The author also needs to do some research. For example, he makes up words in Hawaiian to support part of his story, completely ignoring the fact that there IS a Hawaiian language that does NOT include what he's made up.

The plot meanders a bit, and doesn't really seem to be going anywhere (not so much as the other books in this series, anyway).

The scores that this story has received show that apparently, if you include guns and action, the rest doesn't matter. I can't say I agree.

Plot: 6 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 7

Review by therev   [other reviews by therev]

Reviewed: - (Review Updated: )


Since I found this series I have been waiting for this follow on offering with bated (baited?) breath. I have only read the first 2 chapters which are available and have been pleased with the offering so far. These chapters have reminded us of some of Chuck's problems with his "bosses", but also gives us some instant action which bodes well for the rest of the story.

Keep it going!

We are now up to Ch13, and I have not been disappointed. The "action" is more related to the band and music; if you wanted shoot-em up action by this point - then bad luck! I think that this has strengthened the two main character's character as well as introducing some new people for interactions.

Looking forward to the rest of the story.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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