A New Past by Charlie Foxtrot


Description: A disenchanted scientist is sent into a version of his past and given a chance to change his future. Can he use is knowledge to avert the dystopian future he has lived through or is he doomed to repeat the mistakes of his past?
Size: 2158 KB ( ~ 409,221 words)
Type: Science Fiction
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, mt/ft, Consensual, Romantic, Fiction, Science Fiction, Time Travel, DoOver, First, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Slow, School

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed: 2016-11-27


As I come to the end of my relatively relaxed week, I managed to read another story which I can review. Beginning tomorrow, it is back to 15 hours/day of work, so my time will not be my own.

This story is about a man in a universe similar to ours, but it starts at a time in the not-too-distant future. Just as he discovers a way to make fusion work, Islamic radicals break into his lab bent on destroying it. As a result of the explosion they cause, he wakes up in another time line, or perhaps in his own past, once again a young teen, but with all the knowledge gathered through a lifetime before. He uses the knowledge to advance a multitude of developments, even influencing events from his own past.

For plot, this story deserves an outstanding 10. I will say that some of the science described may or may not be based on actual facts, and the story does discuss a variety of topics, from politics to international relations, death, philosophy and others.

For technical score, a A+ (9). Some chapters deserve a 10, others an 8. Many common errors, such as forth/fourth, to/too, pore/pour are the main detractions. They averaged only a few per chapter, and did not distract from the story.

For appeal, another A+ (9). I like that the MC learned from his previous life's character flaws and, although he struggled with them, he managed to balance them, with the help of his love. I feel that the story could have gone one a bit longer than it did, describing the advance of mankind into space and beyond, but it did not. It was very enjoyable nonetheless.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by RabbiRabbit   [other reviews by RabbiRabbit]

Reviewed: 2014-12-29


A different kind of doover; a scientist goes back in time to his childhood, he is less interested in getting rich than he is in making the world a better place. Rich is a product of hard work, not a function of remembering when the Hunt brothers fucked around with the silver market.

Plenty of good looking women, relatively vanilla sex, exceptionally well drawn characters, a real plot, and did I mention lots of good looking women?

The football star in high school is a given, I guess lots of guys either wish they had been or or are reliving those "Glory Days." (I was raised in New Jersey, Springsteen references are mandatory.)

Other than the high school sports star this is a nontraditional doover and for that I am grateful. It is a well edited and well proofread story, and for that I am grateful, and once you have suspended disbelief that the transfer at death sent him back to his early adolescence, the rest of the story is quite believable.

The major question posed by the story is what if the technology of 2014 became available in in 1986? For those of you that are familiar with the futurist Ray Kurzweil the question has already been asked; for those of you that are not familiar with the head of engineering for Google, go read, "The Singularity is Coming," or, "The Age of the Spiritual Machine."

I asked Charlie Foxtrot eleven months ago to please finish the story and while not yet done he has apparently been re-inspired. For which i am grateful .

That said I question why you are reading this instead of reading the story.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10