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Join Jameson the code monkey in space. As an uber-geek programmer onboard, he manages to make a life; gets the girl; and tries to help an outcast shipmate. Doing a favor for a new friend, he discovers a chilling secret. Also follow a boy running for his life on a mysterious planet; how will their paths cross? Read of Space Marines, space pirates, primitive people, sexy ladies, and hijacking plots. There's a new world to explore and survive. Starts slow, but worth the effort.
Size: 8525 KB (1,575,711 words)
Incomplete and Inactive
Genre: Science Fiction
Sex Contents: Some Sex
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Review by ausie-import   [other reviews by ausie-import]

Reviewed:


This is a story with a huge scope. So far it has been tracking as essentially two stories.

What may be described as the primary is set in a starship, involves a large cast of characters and some more or less improbable situations.

The second revolves around a teen member of a primitive society who has become separated from the tribe. He's making his way home and having a series of adventures on the way.

There have been some hints that the stories are likely to converge at some stage, but that has not yet happened. (Well, at least this seems likely to me -- otherwise there would not be much point in the two plot-lines.)

I've knocked of a few points on technical quality. The overall quality of the writing is actually pretty good. The chapters, however are so large that the effort in proof-reading must be enormous. It is not surprising that errors do creep through.

Personally, I would prefer a smaller chapter at more regular intervals. Weekly? The large chunks on a monthly posting schedule mean that it takes a while to get back into the story.

Is it worth reading? I suppose the big question is whether you like science fiction. If you do, the plot has more than enough realistic bits of alien life to make it a good read. And the characters and interactions are interesting and involving. I want to see how things work out for these people. And really, that is why I keep reading any piece of fiction.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 7 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by Ivan_Ronical   [other reviews by Ivan_Ronical]

Reviewed:


Wow, that was a LOT of words. I'm not sure I've ever read a story on SOL as verbose as this one, but it makes an odd sort of sense given the main character's personality.

This is a placeholder review, which is something that I haven't done before. Given that only 6/17 currently-written (with more on the way) chapters have been released, I wanted to post something now so I could yell at people to read this. Readers of this review should also note that I will be revising the review on completion of the story, so if something inconceivable happens, such as vampires breaking in and getting sparkly all over the ship, I'll be sure to let everyone know. And no, that's not a suggestion for a plot point, Mr. Wigger.

If you enjoy some sci-fi in your stories, there's lots of it here, and it considerably more detail than you're likely to be expecting. There's also some weird tribal/aboriginal side story going on which I can't make any sense of yet. Baffling and infuriatingly interesting.

If you like some sex in your story...well I'm assuming it's going to happen soon, but so far the slow buildup to it has been more than worth the wait, and the foreplay has been top notch--the best I've seen in some time.

Characterization is a strong point here as well. The main character gets fleshed out thoroughly, and he continues to be congruent throughout. Other main/side characters continue to appear and are well-written and enjoyable. Looking forward to seeing more of them.

The weakest aspect of this story, if I had to pick one, would be the grammar--specifically comma and hyphen usage. If you're offended by wrong, over, or under usage of either of these punctuation marks, you're gonna have a bad time here. Overall, I found it easy to ignore since there were only a few parts where it could potentially impact the meaning of a phrase for a reader.

Read this story now and hope that it doesn't become yet another Inactive and Incomplete!

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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