Family Pool Party by Lubrican

Description: Family reunions are usually fairly routine kinds of things. Usually. This one wasn't, though I didn't know that until my niece calmly informed me that my wife was cheating on me with her father. I didn't believe her, so she took me to see it. Then she suggested she'd be happy to help me get even. And that was just the beginning of the party!
Size: 20 KB ( ~ 3,793 words)
Type: Erotica
Sex Contents: Stroke Story
Tags: Ma/Fa, Ma/ft, mt/Fa, Consensual, Heterosexual, Incest, Orgy

Review by Mazeppa   [other reviews by Mazeppa]

Reviewed: 2013-05-09 - (Review Updated: 2013-05-09)

Warning: spoiler lower down after 'the almost French-farcical...'

Here is your model 'stroke story'. There is not a lot of time wasted in build-up, background or description, but enough is provided to give us the bare flesh (so to speak) of the characters. Much of it feels like tongue-in-cheek, but Lubrican captures the burgeoning sexuality of a teenage girl-come-woman with lots of neat little strokes (again, so to speak):

'I wanted to look down at her thrusting breasts, to see how close they were to me' - yep, we men know that situation!

'There was nothing girlish about the woman who kissed me back, either' - easy to imagine that!

'...only been three or four years back, when Megan was filling out and flowering into womanhood.' - yep, that's a 13/14yo for you, in a nutshell.

And Lubrican conveys her here indirectly, with this simple strong phrase: 'My cock had lost some of its firmness while we talked, but now it reared back up to full potential.'

And, yep, don't under-estimate what goes on in the mind and libido of a 14yo, let alone a 17yo: 'It turns out she'd have let me do this when she was still fourteen and still sitting on my lap. Except her mother forbade her.'

Since she is the all-important character, as a male reader I would have liked a little more visual description of 'Megan'. With what little brushstrokes are given, she leaps off the page, so how much more vivid she could have been. Bum? Hair? Eyes? The way she smiles? Legs? Vagina when naked? Come on, Lubrican!

Also, the almost French-farcical ending where we find out that everybody has been having sex with everybody for years in this 'close' family could possibly benefit by a deeper knowledge of their characters, and how they came to be like this. As Megan said, "we are unusual". It was, however, beyond the scope of the genre, so not a weakness as such - but a curiosity to know more about them all!

As with any story, it's an enjoyable ride when it's presented well. As you'd expect of a prize-winning author, grammar, narrative, formatting and dialogue are excellent. Lubrican's talent for good turns of phrase give even this outlandish premise a lot of conviction!

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 8