This is a good but incomplete story with a theme that might not be for every SOL reader. I recommend it but since there is dialog in various colors (thoughts of the different personalities of the submissive heroine) colorblind readers may lose something.
There is a well thought out universe for the story setting, and the author has a separate "story" that discusses his construct so other authors could write stories in the same universe, if desired. I am not aware of any such story.
The story reviewed is not complete and it has been nearly a year since the last chapter. A blog entry confesses to some problems continuing the story, so I wouldn't look for more story anytime soon. However both story and characters make it worth reading even before completion. Its not like there are no other stories on SOL that need an ending.
Doing the numbers, the plot is an 8, an A. It begins set in a school context, and then going to a shopping mall, and other environments readers can identify with, but there are occasional different approaches to reality that bring out how different this story is from most on SOL. I think that is a good thing. Technical quality is a 7, a B. There are some errors where spell check gave the story a correctly spelled word, but the wrong one. There is no credit given to an editor, perhaps one would have helped. Appeal is an 8, an A. It might be higher once complete. If you don't like Bondage, Discipline, Domination, Submission, and S&M, the appeal of this story will be lower. (S&M because I can spell Sadism, but have problems spelling Masochism.) Put them all together, gives BDSM with the D and S pulling double duty.
My reviews are (mostly) designed to bring to readers attention stories they might not otherwise see, that they probably will enjoy. In this case, the other reason is so the author might decide to write some more chapters.