My Birthday, a Start to a New Life? by SarahSxxx

Author's Description:
My first birthday since splitting up with my husband. My sisters best friend starts to lead me down a new path.Based on true events.
Size: 46 KB ( ~ 8,723 words)
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Fa/Fa, Consensual, Lesbian, BiSexual, True Story, Oral Sex, Masturbation

Review by Teloz   [other reviews by Teloz]

Reviewed: 2013-09-08

Anyone that's read some of my reviews, (I'm arrogant enough to believe that someone reads them!) will know that I have a soft spot for lesbian stories, so it's not too much of a surprise that I'm reviewing this one.

My Birthday, a Start to a New Life? is obviously a first for SarahSxxx and, technically, it's pretty good, I've seen a lot worse from much more prolific authors. I would respectfully suggest though, that she seeks the services of a decent editor, to make her stories even better. The errors are fairly common ones, and I'm not going to reiterate them, but the important point is, that they don't detract from the story too much, it's still perfectly readable.

The plot is not original, but Sarah does give it a nice little twist that keeps it fresh. I felt the characters could have been fleshed out more, I never really managed to get a complete image of the main protagonists in my mind, but again, that didn't spoil the story.

At the end of Chapter Two, Sarah says, 'The heat will increase in the next part.' but the story as posted is concluded, I do hope she keeps her promise, and adds at least one more chapter!

I know I've rambled on a bit, but all in all, my gripes are little ones that will be corrected as Sarah gains experience, and that's the real reason for this review. I really, really, want to encourage her to keep on writing! Her work is good, and will only get better.

My Birthday, a Start to a New Life? is an excellent piece of work, and well worth reading. I just hope Sarah sticks with it, and goes on to a long and happy association with SoL.

Read, and enjoy!

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 7 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10