Fooling Around 101 - Version Bravo by Lubrican

Description: When Cindy comes to Uncle Bob, asking to learn some things about petting, before she starts dating, she's not the only one who waits, anxiously, to see what his answer will be. Things get very complicated, very quickly, as Bob takes on a role most men would only dream about. But dreams aren't real. Or are they?
Size: 157 KB ( ~ 29,772 words)
Type: Romantic
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Ma/ft, Consensual, Reluctant, Heterosexual, Uncle, Niece, First, Oral Sex, Masturbation, Petting, Pregnancy

Review by Ivan_Ronical   [other reviews by Ivan_Ronical]

Reviewed: 2012-11-27

After stumbling through another couple dozen stories in my backlog and finding an incredible ZERO stories which were worth my time reviewing (though one did come close), I caved and went back to good ol' Uncle Bob.

I previously reviewed the Alpha version of this story; to avoid confusion, I will refer to them as Alpha and Bravo for the duration of this review, which will contain a large amount of comparison between the two works. It will also be a bit more serious in tone than my other reviews, since almost all the humor which was included in the Alpha review still applies to this one as well.

Bravo is, for the first couple chapters, identical to Alpha. I didn't bother to do a side-by-side comparison, but I suspect that they actually are identical until a certain point, after which they diverge.

Bravo begins with the same premise as Alpha: Uncle Bob's niece wants to learn about sex from our hero, and, since she's so amazingly fuckable, he can't say no. Soon after this is established, however, the whole thing changes direction a bit and starts heading for...well, for lack of a better description, this story (to me) actually stops being a classic Uncle Bob story.

Sure, there's some humorous Lubrican lines here and there, such as: "That's your uterus, telling you it wants to breed." and the return of the Jammies Curve from Alpha, and the fearless Uncle Bob does, in fact, keep boinking his insatiable niece, but the resolution doesn't involve him knocking her up and the two of them living together in sin happily ever after. I suppose it couldn't if it were going to be any different than Alpha. Whoops, spoiler post-alert.

This is certainly an interesting work by Lubrican, creating two stories out of various possibilities from an initial premise; it feels a bit like one of those Choose Your Own Adventure books that were so popular a while back. The usual high writing quality that I expect of Lubrican is present in both stories, so it really comes down to personal preference (and probably reading order) with regard to determining which one is better.

Having read Alpha first, I couldn't help but feel like this one was weird. Imagine if you read/watched the Lord of the Rings series again, but this time Frodo decided to tell the world to fuck off and retired as a hermit, leaving Sam to run the ring to Mordor. It'd be a pretty different story, just as Bravo is substantially different from Alpha in both plot and feel.

For what it's worth, I preferred Alpha. I expect, however, that this is only because I read it first, and Bravo now seems to be a strange parallel dimension for those characters. A very hygapean parallel dimension.

I hope that the author does not take this review as my saying that this is a bad story, or that the effort in writing it was not worthwhile--this is not the case. In fact, I hope that if a similar situation arises in the future, Lubrican will also consider whether creating multiple versions of a story is worth doing.

If you read Alpha, read Bravo. It'll make you think.

Plot: 7 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 6