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The Perfect Visitor by Lubrican

Author's Description:
I was retired. My ex wife hardly ever bothered me. I could do what I wanted, when I wanted. Life was good. Then I got a call from my ex-wife's niece, asking if she could come visit for a week. I hadn't actually ever met her. But I had the room. She needed a place to crash while she did something or other. It wouldn't intrude on my life that much. And it was hard to say no. After all, she WAS family of a sort. And she WAS just a visitor.
Size: 185 KB ( ~ 35,081 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Romantic, Incest, Oral Sex

Review by fuzzywuzzy   [other reviews by fuzzywuzzy]

Reviewed: 2013-05-06

I dunno why, but I'm a sucker for Bob's stories. And then to top it off it is Edited by his personal Editor, Peaches! Now in this delightful story about an old, old, retiree named, surprise, surprise, Bob. Now poor old Bob seems to be a Born Loser, his wife has left him for greener pastures, and his sister-in-law's daughter, who has Goth tendencies,and a six year old son who is a budding Leonardo da Vinci, who is searching for her families roots arrives for a weeks stay with Gramps, falls in love with her, but she plays hard to get.

Now Mr. Lubrican has a policy about incest; if she wants it, she gets it, but no prophylactics, or BCPs, or timely withdrawls, and it makes for a much more entertaining tale.

But the trouble is, when does she, who disdains marriage, get preggers?

Enjoy this story inspired by Peaches herself.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by Ivan_Ronical   [other reviews by Ivan_Ronical]

Reviewed: 2012-04-09

This I'm not really sure what to think, having read this as compared to the author's other works. I think it is, without a doubt, his finest work, and that's saying something for a guy who has written over 200 stories here. To put it another way, I read it over 6 months ago and I remember it well enough to write a review.

The characters in this are very realistic, for reasons that the author explains. The portrayals are real enough that, at a couple times during the story, I felt some real angst for the characters - a rarity as I've said in another review. As orangeade implied in a previous review's comments, reading this story feels a bit like being a voyeur. It's a real struggle to separate the character's feelings from the author's, obviously an intended effect.

The plotting and pacing is good here. I never found myself wishing things would happen faster, and I didn't end up skimming through scenes as I frequently find myself doing. The emotions displayed by each character are easily sufficient for the purpose of keeping a reader hooked if the sex scenes (well-written as always from the author) are not.

As far as stroke goes, I felt that it was a bit downplayed as compared to other stories that Lubrican has written; more emphasis was definitely placed on the emotions behind the sex instead.

Technically, flawless. Boom.

This is a great read. I highly recommend it, though I feel like I'm shouting for people to look through a peephole in the process.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by orangeade   [other reviews by orangeade]

Reviewed: 2011-01-07

What are we to make of Lubrican's "The Perfect Visitor?" Is it fish or fowl? Erotica or romance or something else? One of the best stories he's given us, or something too intensely personal for the average reader to grasp?

Most stories published here wouldn't require or incite interest in such scrutiny, but this is Lubrican, perhaps the finest -- certainly one of the most prolific -- storytellers at storiesonline. And he created his own hype for this one, his 200th story published here, by letting us know in his blog that he specifically was keeping this tale for that place of honor.

But those expecting this to be the "Uncle Bob" story of all "Uncle Bob" stories will likely be disappointed. Lubrican does include this in the "Uncle Bob" pantheon, but this Uncle Bob is like no other, and doesn't really fit.

What we do have here is probably the most honestly personal story that the author has posted, and we can tell this from the dual forwards that open the story. This Uncle Bob is probably the closest representation of author as character that we'll ever get.

Lubrican writes very well, but I will always think of his greatest strength as that of a storyteller, rather than as a writer. And there's not a lot of story here. Oh, there's a plot, but this is more of a two-person character piece, a fictional culmination of a long-time literary relationship, friendship and flirtation, played out as Lubrican would fantasize it.

And that's certainly not a bad thing. The two lead characters are as sharply drawn and fleshed out as you'll read in almost any story on the site. There's plenty of friskiness to appease the erotic minded (although, horror of horrors, no one ends up pregnant . . . yet). Anything Lubrican writes is a pure pleasure to read. But there is a sense that although "Bob" is talking to us throughout, the readers are truly outsiders in this scenario, and that the story was written for an audience of two, author included.

The message, I think, is to not give in to expectation. Read "The Perfect Visitor" and appreciate it for what it is, and for the soul baring it represents.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9