Fighting for Family by Lazlo Zalezac


Description: A woman joins the workforce believing it is necessary to save her family. Six years later she discovers that she is about to lose her family anyway. Facing outright, at times vicious, hostility from her children, she has to fight to regain her place in the family.
Size: 334 KB ( ~ 63,336 words)
Type: Drama
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Slow

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed: 2016-03-17


Another life lesson couched in a story. I started reading this because it appeared in the stream as a random story from the archives. If you have read "Millionaire next door" you will see much the same writing style in this one.

A family is nearly torn apart not by death or illness, but by a lack of communication and a loss of focus on the family itself. The anger, aimed at the mother for her actions, is almost palpable. The family learns to reconnect in the end by getting back to the basics, in the most unusual way we might see in modern society. Join John, Vicki and their children as they get through the anger and become a family again.

There is a little implied sex in the story, but not much, and definitely not explicit nor overlong. There were a few grammatical mistakes, but not enough to distract from the story. I found MND to be an inspirational story at a time I had lost focus in my life. This story may help others in a similar way if they find their families falling apart. Ironically, my favorite character in the story is the priest who helps the family. He is definitely not a conventional one, but he sounds like one whose church I could see myself actually going to.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by Jim S   [other reviews by Jim S]

Reviewed: 2015-09-19 - (Review Updated: 2015-12-24)


Lazlo Zalezac has an uncanny ability as a writer -- that of taking the non-heroic actions of the average person and turning it into something truly heroic, something to be admired. This story is a fine example of that ability. IMHO, horribly underrated at it's current one slightly south of 9. This is one of his better efforts here at SOL.

The story is a gem; the plot is excellent; the characters are rich and almost lovingly developed. One can almost see this being turned into a fine movie with just a little more work. And the emotional impact of Chapter 16 just left me speechless. Word of warning: you need to read the rest of the story first to get the full impact.

The mechanics -- spelling, grammar, punctuation -- are all top rate as one has come to expect with this author. I'm just sorry it took me so long to find it.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10