The Two Day Erection by Lubrican

Description: Dr. Angela Webber found herself in the hill town of Turkey Hollow, covering for another doctor who was ill, when she was faced with a situation they hadn't covered in medical school.
Size: 58 KB ( ~ 10,999 words)
Type: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Reluctant, Heterosexual, Incest, Oral Sex, Masturbation, Size, Doctor/Nurse

Review by Belinda LaPage   [other reviews by Belinda LaPage]

Reviewed: 2014-09-05

19YO Dub is a back-country yokel from Turkey Hollow (Hey, be nice, Bob! I still got kin in the Hollow!) with a delicate ... ahem ... problem. Angela is a hot young locum from the city, filling in for another doctor for a few weeks.

Well now, Angela doesn't need sassy Nurse Holly to tell her the remedy for a persistent erection, but Dub's strict - if incongruous - moral upbringing won't allow him to take matters into his own hands.

Hilarity, as they say, ensues.

What we have here is a story of juxtapositions: a lonely, sophisticated city girl in Deliverance country; a slack jawed yokel with a 9" cock, too moral to jerk off, but not so moral that he would balk at bonking his cousin. Or his aunt. Or his mother. Or his sister. Or his other underage sister. Phew Dub! Is anybody safe?

The last and I believe unintended juxtaposition is the story itself. It is in fact TWO stories. The first is an enchanting, hilarious, whimsical and sexy fairy tale in the doctor's office as Angela uses all means known to medical science (and a few besides) to deflate Dub's monumental erection. The second story is a more austere justification of the first; perhaps to legitimize the motives of Angela and Dub with a romance.

The first story is outstanding; an easy 10. I honestly didn't know whether to laugh or masturbate and was delighted to find I could do both. It's a clever plot, masterfully told, and it's replete with over-filled pussies, throbbing monster cocks and lurching, spurting, multiple orgasms. Goodness, I'm getting worked up again! Give me a moment....

OK. Back again and the head's much clearer.

To be clear; there's nothing WRONG with the second half of the story, but it has a different tone; it's not funny or whimsical like the first half. And that's the problem; it broke in on the immersion I felt in the first half. The worst thing I'm going to say about the second half is that by the time I finished it, I almost forgot how fucking brilliant the first half was. Fortunately, I have a good memory.

PLOT: Great (9) The doctor vs. persistent erection was inspired, clever and beautifully implemented. The transition from whimsical romp to romance didn't ring true to me, hence the one point deduction.

TECHNICAL: Great (9) Lubrican is a wonderful writer; the editing is brilliant. There is only one error, and a subjective one at that (an unannounced perspective shift). The ONLY reason I deducted a mark for it, was because it was RIGHT at the moment of penetration (my favorite) and it spoiled that magic for me by dragging me up a level of immersion in the fantasy.

APPEAL TO ME: Very Good (8) This feels a bit unfair, because the appeal of the first half was an easy 10, but both points were for the reasons I described above.

OTHER: I had a little trouble getting a mental image of Dub. At the beginning it was Cletus the Slack Jawed Yokel from the Simpsons. Yuk! Lubrican filled out the description and by the end of the story, I settled on Hoyt Fortenberry from the TV vampire drama, True Blood. Yummy!

VERDICT: Readers, I dare you not to read Chapter 3. That would make this another Lubrican 10 for me. Girls, Google Hoyt Fortenberry before you begin reading; you'll be glad you did.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 8

Review by fuzzywuzzy   [other reviews by fuzzywuzzy]

Reviewed: 2010-03-12

Things are never what they seem to be. Take, for example, Angela, an M.D. who is so caught up in her Hospital Practice that she has no time for the essentials in life, like a good satisfying fuck. Along comes the chance to ease off on the hard life and act as the Locum Tenens (see wikipedia) for a Doctor in Turkey Hollow. There she meets up with Dub, a hillbilly, with a problem with the Priapic Symptoms, (see above) and how she treats Dub's problem, and cures him. This is Bob Lubrican's latest episode in the life of the oversexed citizens of this beautiful Continent. and we can only hope that his research turns up more of these little gems!


Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10