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Author's Description:
Mike Cavenaugh is facing 40 with an ex-wife he can't stand and a teen-aged daughter he can't begin to understand. The lone bright spot in his life is his son. Then he meets Carrie Walton in one of the unlikeliest of places.
Size: 492 KB (95,124 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Romantic

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed:


If you enjoy a romance, you will like this story. Although there are a number of grammatical and punctuation errors, I am not entirely sure that some are not caused by the Kindle browser, so I will give the author the benefit of the doubt for all of the Ñs that appear instead of commas in the first few chapters. In one spot, later in the story, he refers to Carrie as "Casey". To further confuse the reader, the daughter of the MC is named "Kasey", so it takes a minute to realize who the author really meant. In another area, he credits Kasey with saying her grandmother had a civil war uniform, but from reading the part again, it appears to have been Carrie's grandmother instead. Even with all that, it is still technically better than average.

The story deals with some dark issues, as one of the main characters has been kidnapped and beaten, but it blends in the perfect amount of humor with it. In one scene, the MC's 17-year old daughter says: "I blame the illiterate bloggers for the downfall of the English language — well, that and the bubble-headed bimbos that MSNBC and FOX News trot out. I think their bust size is bigger than their IQ." If that quote doesn't put a smile on your face, then we may not agree on this one. At several points in the story, you can actually hear the repartee between the characters, as you imagine them speaking within hearing distance.

The MC's confrontation with his daughter at one point in the story is poignant, and will strike a chord with anyone who has had children that age. Chapter 18 is filled with some discussions about relevant political and socioeconomic topics of today's life in the US. When I found myself nodding along with the conclusions, I just had to shake my head. There is definitely a mixture of humour, drama, seriousness, action and romance in this story, so prepare for it all. The sex in the story is there, but mainly in the background, and does not disrupt the actual story nor become a focal point.

Altogether, a great read.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 7 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by Teloz   [other reviews by Teloz]

Reviewed:


Finding Shelter is unashamedly a romance, it's also a really good read. There are a couple of odd scenes; I can't, for example, imagine anyone holding their own arm to stop themselves from hitting someone, not as described anyway. Apart from that it's a heart-warming and enjoyable story.

What really drags it down though, is the poor editing; missed words, missed plurals, poor punctuation, in at least one case half a sentence is missing. Despite this, it's a good story, and if you can work around the textual faults, well worth the read.

Make the effort, and enjoy!

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 6 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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