Hyperactive Alex by zaliterr

Description: Alex is a bright kid, gifted and cursed with a quick mind and lots of energy. This is his quest to defeat boredom and find suitable entertainment.
Size: 201 KB ( ~ 38,116 words)
Type: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: mt/ft, mt/Fa, Fa/ft, Consensual, Romantic, Heterosexual, Polygamy/Polyamory, Slow, Violent, School

Review by The Black Knight   [other reviews by The Black Knight]

Reviewed: 2008-12-27

I'm really quite conflicted on this story; the risk of discouraging a new author whose work was at least interesting is combined with the risk of imparting a false sense of confidence that hasn't yet been earned.

Frankly, the technical aspects of this story were horrible, particularly with the consistent tense issues and a number of typos which an editor should have caught. It's a discouragingly common mistake new writers make, to not first have an editor look over something before posting.

The relative lack of conflict - or at least the extreme ease with which most of the conflicts were resolved - along with the use of several worn-out cliche elements similarly detracted from the story. Again, this is something an editor should have been able to help with.

The other key to a good story is in the characters, and it is in this one area that the author excelled. It would have been nice to see some more of several of the antagonists, and for some of the supporting cast developed more, because this was largely a character-driven story and some characters had real potential for driving the plot but played minor roles.

So, even with all the flaws, the story was enjoyable. Those with low tolerance for spotty quality of writing or overdone cliches, those looking for stroke, and those looking for truly original plots will be likely disappointed. Those interested in reading an early effort, which is a good standard 'prodigy' coming-of-age piece, by a new author will probably like it. I'd recommend it, although it might be best to wait to see if a revision is in the works.

Plot: 7 | Technical Quality: 5 | Appeal to Reviewer: 8