The Collapse: A New Beginning: Book 1 by JimWar

Author's Description:
Steve was fishing when the end of civilization occurred. It happened so quietly that he didn't even know it had happened. There were a few scattered survivors of what later was called The Collapse. Follow Steve and one small group of survivors as they attempt to find others and regain what was lost. This is the first book in what hopefully will be a multi-book series.
Size: 738 KB ( ~ 139,947 words)
Genre: Science Fiction
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, BiSexual, Heterosexual, Science Fiction, Post Apocalypse, Group Sex, First, Oral Sex

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed: 2008-09-16

In "The Collapse: A New Beginning: Book 1", we have the story of a man who was out fishing when apparently aliens made 98% of the population disappear. Upon reaching the marina, he meets two gorgeous women, and they proceed to try to survive life in the new world. Read along to find out how they did.

While there is a fair amount of sex in this story, it is rarely described in a graphic fashion. In those times when it is given a graphic description, I didn't find myself getting all that exciting about it. I found this to have little stroke value, despite the volume of sex going on.

The plot itself was simply average, and felt very recycled from other post-apocolaypse stories. Everything felt predictable, and there was very little conflict that felt urgent or exciting. The man and his new found harem had all the advantages, and no real setbacks. Things were just too easy for them.

Dialogue between characters was often glossed over by the narrator's description of things that happened, especially early on. This made the whole story feel less alive.

Technically, the story was fairly well written and edited. There were a few minor technical problems, but nothing that really distracted from the story as a whole.

Overall, this felt like a watered down version of some of the more famous post-apocolaypse stories found here on SOL. The lack of a more dynamic plot and better dialogue hurt the story. With poor stroke value, the total effect was unfulfilling for me. This story is just average.

Plot: 6 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 5