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The River Rat by Anthony Concept

Author's Description:
A small engineering workshop is given the contract to refurbish a massive gearbox. See how the workshop expands and its employees develops with it. The title 'River Rat' doesn't become obvious until midway through the story. Not a stroke story
Size: 47 KB ( ~ 8,913 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, Heterosexual, Safe Sex, Slow

Review by Teloz   [other reviews by Teloz]

Reviewed: 2012-11-10

It took me a while to realize that 'Anthony Concept' was one of our Antipodean cousins, so I guess his writings will drive our cousins from the colonies crazy! I realize now, that I speak three languages, though none fluently, American, Australian, and English.

Humour aside, AC writes a good story, and the River Rat pair of stories are a gentle romp through the life of a clever engineer. The stories are great, the characters well drawn, and believable, but ... You just knew that 'but' was coming didn't you?

AC falls down a little on the technical side of his work, for example, here's a section from the first story:

'He lectured "what happens when you heat a piece of metal?" "It expands said I" "and where the hell is that hub going to expand to" he roared.'

Suitably edited it would read better as:

"What happens when you heat a piece of metal?" he lectured.

"It expands," said I.

"And where the hell is that hub going to expand to?" he roared.

Note the carriage returns between the lines of dialogue! Just a few minor changes make all the difference, and maintain the flow of the story.

All in all though, these problems don't detract too much, more of a minor irritation than a serious defect, so feel free to accept the tales for joyous romps they are.

Read and enjoy!

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 7 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10