Eyes by Dual Writer

Description: Chuck, a young electrical engineer, finds a deal on a house. An answer to his long term plans for his future. The house becomes surprise deal and comes with some fantastic benefits. A slow to start romance that evolves into lot's of sexy and often romantic fun.
Size: 615 KB ( ~ 116,622 words)
Type: Romantic
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Fa/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, Incest, Brother, Sister, Father, Daughter, Swinging, Group Sex, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Squirting, Pregnancy, Cream Pie, Exhibitionism

Review by fuzzywuzzy   [other reviews by fuzzywuzzy]

Reviewed: 2009-04-23 - (Review Updated: 2012-05-21)

Now lets get down and dirty! Chuck is my sort of guy. He loves T-Birds, as long as they are convertibles, two seater models built before Ford went crazy, Oh, did I mention he just loves fucking. In this case young women, mothers of those young women, his girlfriend's Mother, her Mother, and her Grandmother; and all the neighbours wives, too.

And his sisters, all four of them (two sets of twins who love him to pieces!)

Along the way Chuck, and Sunshine, fall in love and get married, and just to simplify matters, they marry June at the same time. Oh, by the way, June is Sunshine's sexy Mother. So Enjoy! I did.

p.s., somehow D.W. likes Chuck, I think!

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by The Black Knight   [other reviews by The Black Knight]

Reviewed: 2007-11-27

I normally select stories to review prior to reading them, and this story is the first time I regret that process. Initially, the story was horrendously miscoded. At this time, while some story content still is not indicated in the codes, what is listed is pretty much indicative of what the story will be.

On a technical level, the editing seemed to have consisted of simply running a spell-checker over the text, as there were numerous "you're/your", "to/too", "he/her/here" style mistakes. It did improve marginally in later chapters, though.

The plot was more involved than a typical stroke piece, although it did contain some fairly standard cliche elements. The characters, however, are where this story shone in the early chapters. Once the story degenerated into a 'swing' stroke piece, and fell into the trap that too many such stories do - basically denigrating anyone not part of the swinger community, and implying swingers are in all ways superior to the rest of the world - even the characters weren't enough of a draw to make the story interesting. (Here, I feel compelled to point out: if the story had been coded as 'swing' before I started it, I would never have bothered reading it. So that may color my opinions on this one.)

For those who are fans of this style - and who can overlook the typos - it'd probably be a very good read. But for those who like relatively error-free stories, give it some time, as the author seems to indicate that the story will eventually be edited. For those who have a problem with any of the listed codes, it's probably best to pass this one by, as it contains them all and more.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 7 | Appeal to Reviewer: 4