Reviewed: 2011-12-04 - (Review Updated: 2011-12-04)
This is a good story, with an innovative plot, and a great ending. You can't beat a happy ending!
Sadly though, some of the shine is taken away by bad editing and inappropriate capitalization. I know that a "Dinning room" is meant to be a dining room, but it spoils the enjoyment of the story, particularly when the unnecessary capitalization draws attention to the error.
Interestingly, I got the feeling that this story could be longer, could have done with a little 'fleshing out' to make it read more smoothly. That's purely a personal feeling though, you'll have to read it to see if you agree.
Overall though, a good story, well worth reading.
PS: Sometimes, writing a review is a bit like poking an author in the eye with a sharp stick. With the email from DW still rattling about in my inbox, (the author is notified when a review appears) I have to say that the re-edited version of the story is better. I don't think I can retract what I said earlier, but the 'Dinning room' has disappeared, thank Gaia, other improvements have been made, and the tale has been tightened up.
It's an even better story now, and it's still well worth reading. Enjoy!
I'm a sucker for a good love story, and this are it! Professor Chuck (a favourite name for DW's Heroes) is having the time of his life wandering around Victoria, BC, when he meets up with Michelle and her beautiful milk filled breasts, and her seventeen children without a husband or father in sight.
So from being a frustrated guy suffering from the dreaded E.D., who wanted, but didn't have, children, he was plunged into a passel load of 'em. And by the end of a few days of co-habital bliss he not only falls in love with the rest of Michelle's body and mind, he also gets involved with being a Daddy to the seventeen kids and the next bunch of rug rats already on their way, with his help, of course, and what seems to be a permanent cure for his affliction.