Fool Me Once by Longhorn__07


Description: He caught her cheating once and took her back. She thought she could do it again and fool him again? Huh-uh. He's not about to let that happen.
Size: 250 KB ( ~ 47,407 words)
Type: Drama
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Cheating

Review by aliasx   [other reviews by aliasx]

Reviewed: 2006-09-17


Though all of Longhorn's stories are about cheating, the plots of his stories vary. Fool Me Once is a story about revenge. Ryan, the protagonist, is angry. Longhorn does an excellent job exploring Ryan's exact motivations and feelings. Not just a two-dimensional character, it is easy to understand exactly what Ryan is thinking at every step of the story. Longhorn makes it very easy for readers to sympathize with Ryan. In addition to providing a vivid picture of Ryan's thought processes, Longhorn also shows just how despicable his wife's actions really are. This makes it even easier for readers to enjoy it when Ryan seeks revenge.
The revenge is really the center of the story. Watching the plot for revenge unfold is highly enjoyable. This story really defines the phrase, "I love it when a plan comes together!" After the first few chapters, it becomes clear exactly what is going to happen. But it is ever so enjoyable watching.
Note: If you enjoyed this story, you'll probably also enjoy Al Steiner's Sacking the Quarterback, and vice versa.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: N/A | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by mbeau   [other reviews by mbeau]

Reviewed: 2006-01-20


This is, quite simply, an absolutely amazing story. The characters, the plot, everything about it is just stellar.

The story is slow and very compelling. Right from the start, you are pushed into empathizing with the hero. You feel his pain and misery at what happens to you and the joy at the very end.

The path from one to the other is very complex and not for those looking for a quick stroke story.

The characters are very believable, as are the situations that they are put through. Any complaints I have are minor, amounting to desiring to see more about the time between the first and second cheating incidents.

I am just disappointed that the story was posted all at once. It would have gotten a lot more exposure and views had it been posted as a serial.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10