Leefstic by John Wales

Author's Description:
Leefstic is a boy determined to succeed. He settles down to repair his ship on a barbaric planet. The insane natives call it 'Earth'.
Size: 1668 KB ( ~ 316,302 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: mt/ft, Consensual, Romantic, Science Fiction, Group Sex, Harem, Slow

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed: 2017-11-26


A young alien's ship is damaged in a space battle and the ship's AI places the ship's occupants into hibernation. He wakes up more than 200 years later, only to find the ship adrift in space. In searching nearby systems, he discovers Earth and proceeds to make a home for himself as he falls in love with earthlings and moves to create a new race.

Normally, my reviews go in order of plot, technical score and then appeal. This is one of the exceptions. I can't fully grade the plot because I could not finish reading the story. The story has great promise, but is replete with errors, to the point that it made it hugely distracting to read it. Few stories on the site receive a perfect technical score from me, and I admit it. This simply needs a good editor to spend a few weeks proofreading it. With good editing, this story may make a good one worth paying for. My grading is a 10 for outstanding, a 9 for what would be an A+, an 8 for an A, 7 for a B, 6 for a C and 5 for what would be a D on a school paper.

Because of the errors, I have to give it a 5 for Technical Score and a 7 for appeal so far. I reserve the right to raise those scores of the story is edited properly and many of the errors corrected. Most, but not all of the mistakes were in the use of homophones. Principal vs. principle, too vs. to, and a number of similar errors simply made the story difficult to read.

Plot: N/A | Technical Quality: 5 | Appeal to Reviewer: 7