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Author's Description:
Two women, straight and lesbian, come together.
Size: 219 KB (41,871 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Fa/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, Lesbian, First

Review by Teloz   [other reviews by Teloz]

Reviewed:


I really can't say much more than Andrew said in his review, I just felt I had to say something in order to try and attract a few more readers.

A wonderful story, beautifully written, with realistic dialogue that draws you into the tale.

A true love story! Read it, and weep, but read it you must!

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed:


This story was brilliantly told to us through the eyes of Jess, a widowed straight woman with a lesbian daughter. And at a gay-bi-lesbian picnic/concert she attends with her daughter and her daughter's lover, she meets Gayle, a nice woman who happens to be a lesbian.

The story beautifully portrays how Jess falls in love with her new friend. She doesn't fall in love with the lesbian Gayle, but with the person Gayle. And Gayle falls in love with Jess. Gayle doesn't seduce Jess, so much as Jess seduces herself through her newfound joy at having someone she can be intimately close with.

The story isn't about the sex, though it is present. The sex is well crafted to show the explorations and gentleness with which Gayle makes Jess comfortable with what they are doing. It isn't written for stroke value, however, and is more gently arousing than some may wish for if they are looking for stroke value. The author even cautions those looking for stroke material that this wasn't written with that intent, but the moments were erotic and extremely realistic. If you've never been lucky enough to watch two women truly make love for the first time, reading this will give you a glimpse into the beauty and subtleness that men often have a difficulty in capturing.

The only negative I had with the story is that the writer tends to write some long and complex sentences. The overuse of commas in some places creates sentences that were difficult to read and follow at times. As this mostly happened during Jess' thoughts, the writer may have been attempting to convey the actual confusion Jess was feeling. Unfortunately, they would leave me feeling like I had to read the sentence over again to be sure I followed it correctly. A small technical matter that shouldn't detract a reader too much, unless they are a stickler for comma use.

Over all, I highly recommend this story. JT Malone has crafted an incredibly rich and romantic tale, and if you like romance at all, you will love it.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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