Surprises by rlfj

Author's Description:
A young woman accidentally walks in on her parent's swap party, and ends up with a surprising number of life changes.
Size: 522 KB ( ~ 98,987 words)
Genre: Incest
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Fa/Fa, Teenagers, Consensual, Romantic, Incest, Mother, Father, Daughter, Swinging, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Sex Toys, Exhibitionism, Voyeurism

Review by orangeade   [other reviews by orangeade]

Reviewed: 2010-05-25

Rlfj's "Surprises" seems promising from the start, and turns out to be a pretty good read . . . but just can't seem to provide the payoff that one would like.

The premise is intriguing: teenager Amber Campbell returns home unannounced after a weekend sleepover at a friend's house falls apart, only to find that the parents she had always thought to be among the "stuffiest people on the planet" are hosting a full-scale orgy. While trying to sneak into the house, she is discovered by some party-goers who assume she's there for the fun as well, and quickly gets sucked into the debauchery. Her parents only discover her presence after Amber's face has been buried between her mother's thighs and her ass has been full of her father's cock.

On the day after, Amber and her parents come to terms with the situation, and the 18-year-old realizes she's enjoyed herself and wants to continue in the lifestyle. For a number of chapters the story runs in parallel plots, of the young beauty having some very adult experiences while at the same time trying to slowly bring along her high school boyfriend to some level of sexual sophistication. After he proves to be a typical male teenage idiot, she eventually moves on to meet her true love. But how will he react to the swap-party side of her life?

A lot happens in "Surprises," but unfortunately it doesn't reach the heights it could, and the problem is Amber. She doesn't react the way someone her age would to the highly sexualized life she's now leading. She's not the town slut, but she falls into things all too easily.

For a girl who previously had been relatively inexperienced, she easily accepts evenings of multiple partners and incestuous relations with her parents. There's not a scrap of angst here, and while the reader can see exactly where the story is heading, Amber doesn't spend a thought on the fact that she's eventually going to have to come clean to her boyfriend, until the second-to-last chapter. Even then, the ending is a bit of a deus ex machina, and far too comfortable.

But maybe this is all looking at it from the wrong point of view. "Surprises" appears to have been intended to be a feel-good story, and in that sense it works fine. Rlfj's writing is clean and reads smoothly, his characters are well-developed, and there's a ton of sex, some of which is pretty hot. All of this, with no worries about any uncomfortable introspection . . .

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 8

Review by fuzzywuzzy   [other reviews by fuzzywuzzy]

Reviewed: 2008-08-28 - (Review Updated: 2008-11-04)

This is a love story; a story of Amber and Jack who find each other and fall in love ; simple eh? Don't you believe it for one second. You see, Amber comes home one night and finds a swingers party going on full bore, so she joins in the fuckfest and her mummy and daddy have a serious talk to her the following A.M. and she joins in the family way of life. The rules being N.O. means no, and no pain , bondage, and be on the pill until you both decide to have a baby.
Along the way Amber meets up with some very nice men and women and practices her sexual techniques until she is perfect! She must be a slow learner, because she has to do it over and over again. rifji's tale is so much fun I tried to give it a stroke vote of twenty but the powers that be forbade it. Now a recommendation, read it now, then read it again in a few months, and then read it again later on. Boy it grows on you. Enjoy!

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10