New Company Policies by StoryMaster69

Author's Description:
New laws are put in place abolishing a person's ability to declare bankruptcy. Instead a person in financial difficulty signs up for a term indenture contract. See what happens to Susan when she does not properly research where she is agreeing to work to pay off her debts.
Size: 74 KB ( ~ 14,033 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Fa/Fa, Coercion, Lesbian, Masturbation, Sex Toys, Voyeurism

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed: 2005-10-19

This story has an interesting premise. People that are unable to pay their creditors have a new way of handling their problems. Instead of filing for bankruptcy, they instead become indentured employees, with little to no rights.

Susan was left by a boyfriend that she foolishly allowed to use her credit cards, thus putting her in a debt she can't get out of on her own. She ends up intendtured to Silva Corp, a company that makes sex toys. She has to perform using toys both solo and with another woman while being filmed, for advertising purposes.

I felt this story had a lot more potential than the author realized. It also felt it was over before it should have been. There was 4 and a half years left on her indentured contract, and the story ends with the reader feeling like only the tip of the iceberg was touched. This is the key reason I gave the plot a 5. Not because I felt it was a poor plot, but because it felt unfinished.

The forced sex was interesting, and Susan and Melissa having to be lovers without a say in the matter was a good approach. It had the potential to be hotter, in my opinion. The sex between Susan and Melissa always felt like "Well, we have to do this, so let's just get through it", even though they did more than just use the toy. Maybe it was their bleak acceptance of it that took something away from it. Even the forced sex with Ms. Reynolds left a resigned feeling in Susan.

This isn't a bad story, mind you. I just felt it wasn't finished yet. I felt that StoryMaster69 could have had a few more chapters, or could write a 2nd book. More of the story would have probably fixed most of the issues I have with the story.

So, should you read it? Yes, I think you should. Just know that you may be disappointed in how it ends, and maybe if you are, and write to StoryMaster69, he will take up the pen again for a book 2!

Plot: 5 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 6