Sales Team by Cat5


Description: A desperate, beautiful young woman has lost everything, but then meets a man who might be her white knight.
Size: 81 KB ( ~ 15,360 words)
Type:
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, Heterosexual, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Slow

Review by Lugh   [other reviews by Lugh]

Reviewed: 2016-06-03


An excellent review by manddscott reminded me that I also found this an excellent story. I agree that it would have been better longer and more fleshed out, but there's always the school of thought that audiences should be left wanting more.

It's a theme of personal growth as well as romance, which I very much like. A quote from the story itself characterizes the whole development:

"I will never forget the next three months of my life; it was a roller coaster of selling, sex, and relationship growth."

I might have enjoyed more explicit sex and descriptions, but there was no question that they were having fun.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed: 2016-06-02


A man sees a young lady in desperate need and comes to her aid. Someone who read another of my reviews recommended this story to me. Ironically, after I of through the first few paragraphs, I realized that I had read this little gem before. I could not give an exact date as to when, but it was likely at least a year ago.

This is a very short story, with only 3 chapters. In those chapters, the author manages to include quite a bit of plot. It is not perfectly fleshed out, but it comes close. I give it an A+ (9).

For technical score, I spotted only 5 or 6 small errors spread out across the story, and none horribly egregious. Another A+ (9).

For personal appeal, this gets an outstanding score of 10. I love the white knight coming to the rescue of the fair maiden. I like that he takes time to help her on her feet, falling in love with her over time, albeit a relatively fast timeframe. I love that they become a true team, who choose to walk side by side and hand in hand rather than having one subservient to the other. The playfulness detailed in parts of the story also draw a reader in, and you can't help but grin at some of the scenes. I am glad I got a chance to locate this one again. It makes a great small diversion.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed: 2006-01-12


In "Sales Team", we read about Phil and Holly. Phil is a guy working in software sales, and Holly is a woman that personifies that old photo we have seen of a cat dangling from a rope and says "just hang on, baby!" She's reached rock bottom just as she meets Phil. Read along as Phil picks up her life, spirit, and affection.

Both Phil and Holly are believable characters, and that helps create a strong foundation for the story. The plot moves along at a decent pace, keeping my interest of the story at a natural peak, with no real dips.

Sexually, the story is good. While the sex scenes are nice, they aren't written purely for stroke. In a sense, this is a good thing, as the story is foremost a romantic tale. Don't read it for stroke, but you may find yourself aroused!

Technically, there are no real errors that I noticed, so nothing jarred me out of my immersion of the story.

Read this one. It's high score is more than justified, especially if you like romantic tales.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10