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This story combines magic and science in our world. The hero is a man from a world where magic works, and he has this ability in our world. It will deal with the trials and tribulations of discovery.
Size: 528 KB (103,043 words)
Genre: Fiction
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Magic

Review by The Old Fart   [other reviews by The Old Fart]

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A man comes home from work and realizes three strangers have been in his house because his clock strikes three as he walks in the door. Right from the start, you know this is going to be different. Paul's just your normal, everyday Private Investigator. Except he's been on this planet for over 120 years and uses magic in his everyday life. He's got something and "The Government" wants it. Whether it takes the form of the FBI, NSA or Homeland Security, it doesn't bode well. And to top it off, their prime informant is the man who brought him to this planet as a child and was supposed to take care of him.

Most of this story takes place on another planet, where Paul finds out he's a Duke who has long been presumed dead. A planet where magicians are about as common as accountants. And it's not unheard of to come across a god or goddess. Or a dragon.

I download stories onto my laptop and take it bed with me. Instead of reading a book, I read what's on the screen. I'll normally read a chapter or two and go to sleep. Not last night. I'll admit, it was after 2:00 when I started reading. But I "just one more chaptered" myself until 4:30. I wasn't much good today. And I found time to finish it off. It's that good. I've already started Book II like a damn fool.

If you want sex, go somewhere else. For a guy who's been around for 120 years, Paul's pretty juvenile – more like a junior high kid with a crush. There are a few minor typos. Something I found irritating is the number of times the word TO is used to mean TOO. Just enough for me to wonder why Volentrin or his editor didn't catch it. But these are all minor. The story is captivating, exciting, makes you wonder what is going to happen next, in short, all the things that make you want to forget about real life and keep turning that page.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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