Avatar: Establishment, Book 2 by Dark Pen


Description: A man becomes the Avatar of the Goddess of Sex. These books chronicle his adventures.
This is the continuation of Avatar: Establishment, Book 1. It picks up right where Book 1 left off.
Size: 2517 KB ( ~ 477,298 words)
Type:
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Ma/ft, ft/ft, Fa/ft, Mult, Consensual, Lesbian, BiSexual, Heterosexual, Science Fiction, BDSM, DomSub, MaleDom, FemaleDom, Rough, Humiliation, Torture, Group Sex, Orgy, Anal Sex, Fisting, Sex Toys, Lactation, Water Sports, Voyeurism

Review by RabbiRabbit   [other reviews by RabbiRabbit]

Reviewed: 2014-12-30


Ten years, 130+ chapters, and it feels like the story is about halfway thru. I really do not approve. And I am not at all into BDSM.

So my question then is: why is this my favorite story on SOL?

The answer is, I'm not sure. The writing is is spot on, this is a well written, well edited, and well proofread story. The plot is as complex as could be. The characters are anything but cardboard, OK, there are a few fillers for characters, but they are not around much. There are a whole bunch of side stories barely touched, more like teasers for for the next iteration, Avatar III. Essentially I want to buy a paperback copy of the completed work and frankly, I would like to do it this week as winter break is over on January 12 and I will have no time to read long fiction again until May of 2016 when I will be handing in my master's thesis.

Besides the BDSM there is lots of other marginally less kinky sex. There are motorcycles and mafia and crooked cops and honest cops and magic and a goddess and hot young teenage girls and crazy mothers and crazy fathers and smart people, there are a lot of smart people, there are also a few morons. There is ritual and new words to learn and good guys and bad guys and martial arts and lots and lots of cool stuff.

DAMMIT TO HELL DARK PEN, SIT THE FUCK DOWN AND FINISH THE STORY. I'M 67 GOING ON 76 AND I AM NOT GOING TO LIVE LONG ENOUGH AT THE RATE YOU ARE WRITING...please.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10