Shadow on the Edge by Aeralyndal


Description: THIS is the story I thought I was submitting under the title "Birth of Shadow" NO EXPLICIT SEX.
Size: 660 KB ( ~ 125,156 words)
Type:
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Science Fiction

Review by barron of ideas   [other reviews by barron of ideas]

Reviewed: 2015-05-24


This is VERY good story. It's long and filled with battles but there is a hero with issues and he develops and grows as a person as the story expands. He starts as a private, with some flashbacks to explain his past and ends as a Count on a new planet where he and his family are movers and shakers. Most of the combat involves very large armored Mechs which have lasers, missles, machine guns, and armor in varying amounts. Some can jump and others fly.

I understand it is based on a game some of you have heard of before. The story does not require any familiarity with the game. Its set in interstellar space long after current era. There is so much detail there is no point in trying to give an explanation of what happens in the story. A young man grows up and succeds in his carrer of being a Mech pilot and officer of a mercenary military force. If you like war stories you should be happy with this one.

I am going to give the plot a ten. There are lots of twists and turns and unexpected developments occur with little warning. The technical quality is pretty good, considering the length of the story. I saw a few creative spellings or errors but not enough to throw me out of the story. Lets give it a nine. I try very hard only to give one story a month a ten, and I already used my ten for May, so this is a nine. Six is a C. Seven is a B, Eight is an A. This is an A plus.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9