The Clitorides are open for voting. [ Dismiss ]
Author's Description:
Have you ever seen someone that looks like they have it all? Fame, fortune, hung like a horse with a new woman on his arm every week? Then why don't they seem happy? (Note: Unedited, so be forewarned)[Violence]
Size: 616 KB (121,514 words)
Genre: Coming of Age
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: mt/ft, mt/Fa, Consensual, Heterosexual, DomSub, First, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Masturbation, Size

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed:


A guy who seems to have it all describes the events that turned him into someone who others feel is cold, unloving. The majority of the story is a flashback on the man's teen years, as he attempts to find love.

For plot, I give this an A+ (9). Some of the side characters are not fully developed, but that is why they are side characters. The author does a very nice job with the main character, exploring his thoughts and the process which turns him into who he later is.

For technical score, a C (6). The author does warn us that it is an unedited story. There were a plethora of misspelled words, incomplete words, homophonic errors and other small mistakes.

For personal appeal, another A+ (9), even with all of the mistakes. The angst felt by the MC at times is palpable. In my opinion, this is one of those stories that overcome a bad technical score to be a very, very good story. Frankly, I've read a couple of other stories by this author, and am surprised that they did not score higher.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 6 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9
Close
 

WARNING! ADULT CONTENT...

Storiesonline is for adult entertainment only. By accessing this site you declare that you are of legal age and that you agree with our Terms of Service and Privacy Policy.