Reviewed: 2016-05-22 - (Review Updated: 2016-05-22)
This is one of those stories which, as a grammar Nazi, make me cringe due to the sheer number of grammatical errors, punctuation errors and even missing or extra words. I would estimate there was at least one mistake per paragraph, on average.
With that said, the story was captivating enough that, even with the abundant mistakes I still read it and enjoyed it. Not only that, I stayed up half the night to finish it.
For plot, I give the story an A (8). This could truly be developed into a universe of its own, where gifts/powers are bestowed upon those deemed worthy by the Old Gods. Who is worthy and who falls short, how do they put the Gifts to use, and a plethora of other questions to be answered.
Technical quality, as previously mentioned, is where this story falls short. The story could truly use a good editor, and I believe that would make it a much better read. The sheer number of errors distracted me from the story a bit, making it a little choppier than it should have been. It currently earns a D (5). I reserve the right to modify this score if the work gets properly edited.
For appeal, I give this an A+ (9), and that is saying a lot given the technical score. If we can get past the editing issues, I really loved the story, and would enjoy reading more of these. To me, the story is somewhat analogous to the Valdemar series of books by Mercedes Lackey. The Gifted are like Valdemar's Heralds, there to help right the wrongs. They don't always come from the best backgrounds, but that is what makes some of them so memorable.