After Five Years by DeeBee

Author's Description:
Five years after his engagement broke up, Greg sees his old girlfriend again - in the middle of a tricky mission in Northern Africa. As if his life wasn't already complicated enough with his unusual family.
Size: 438 KB ( ~ 83,058 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Ma/ft, Romantic, Heterosexual, Fiction, Cheating

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed: 2016-06-29 - (Review Updated: 2016-07-05)

A man sitting in a cafe in a foreign country sees his ex-fiance walk in 5 years after they split up. In the intervening years, he has done work for the CIA under various covers. The story tells the tale of everything leading up to that point as well as what came later.

For plot, I give the story an A (8). There were areas in which there appeared to be too little detail, and the plot twists all over the place. Overall, however, I believe that the author did a good job fleshing the story out.

For technical score, this is again where the work suffers a bit and earns a C (6). Although there were a few misapplied terms, the bulk of the items lowering the score were extra words or missing words. It would appear that and some areas the author is translating from his language into English, and the simple fact is that the two languages do not translate word for word.

For appeal, I believe that the story earns a B+/A- (7-8). I like the main character, but some of the situations he gets himself into stretched the bounds of credibility just a little. The fact that it seems every woman he falls in love with betrays him, only to seemingly regret it later, is either a bad characterization of women, or the MC simply has horrible luck with the opposite sex.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 6 | Appeal to Reviewer: 7