Dragons and Coal Cinders by Myrtle Lane

Author's Description:
A successful crop duster pilot on vacation in Scotland goes missing in a graveyard during the alignment of planets. He finds his online gaming passion and his thousands of hours of practical experience at low-level flying are required to stay alive in a different world. Traveling to another world of aggressive beasts, steam machines and world war, our hero fights to stay alive and get back home.
Size: 211 KB ( ~ 40,012 words)
Genre: Fantasy
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Magic, Fiction, Military, War, Steampunk, Science Fiction, Paranormal, Violent

Review by Jetcrash747   [other reviews by Jetcrash747]

Reviewed: 2016-05-13

The story starts out; Standing in the dark at midnight in front of wrought iron cemetery gates probably wasn't a common event for the young tourist in Dundee. William a crop duster pilot visiting Scotland with his mother. When out for a night stroll to see as rare planetary grouping in the midnight sky, hears a feminine voice, falls to his knees and wakes up flying an airplane that is in a stall! You don't really find out what is going on until the last chapter. It is a very good exciting story. Hopefully the first of many the author 'Myrtle Lane' has left the door open for. Imagine flying in an open cockpit of biplane fighting flying dragons. Surviving a plane crash waking up in a 1904 hospital with nurses caring for you. 'Dragons and Coal Cinders' an exciting tale with action, adventure and a smattering of sex implied but just used to set the mood and atmosphere. A great story well worth reading.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed: 2016-05-13

A man gets transported to an alternate universe and into the body of a pilot, in the middle of a flight. This new universe has dragons and magic, but also has some traits of steampunk while being set in a time around the first world war.

For plot, I give this a B (7). It is better than average, but there are too many questions unanswered. At the end of the story, he is just transported back to his first body. Personally, I would like to know more, both about him before this story took place as well as what happened to the character in the alternate universe after he came back. To me, this almost seems like the introduction to an entire series of stories.

For technical score, I give it an A (8). There were a handful of mistakes per chapter, but they did not affect the story.

For personal appeal, a B(7). Again, better than average, but too many things left unanswered, and too much of the story left to tell, even though iit appears that the story is done.

Plot: 7 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 7