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A swashbuckling tale set in the Age of Discovery. Join Dom Pedro de la Vega, a young Portuguese nobleman and adventurer and follow him as he sails in search of adventure, fame, and revenge.
Size: 998 KB (190,147 words)
Genre: Action/Adventure
Sex Contents: Minimal Sex
Tags: mt/ft, Consensual, Fiction, Historical

Review by RabbiRabbit   [other reviews by RabbiRabbit]

Reviewed:


Sailing ships and adventure and pirates and pretty ladies needing rescue sums up a fun story. The story takes place in Portugal and in Nigeria and sometimes the Congo and for a while in North Africa. It takes place sometime between the The Treaty of Tordesillas (1494) that divided the world between Spain and Portugal, and 1526, when Portugal started shipping African slaves to the New World.

We have before us a young nobleman, hot twin cousins, a rescue, a royal court, a traitorous ambassador, and a couple naval battles. And some other stuff.

A word about the naval battles: If you are expecting naval battles as the ever inventive Argon writes them, forget about it. Those battles took place in the early 19th century and these battles take place in the early 16th century and naval architecture and the quality of gunpowder and the technology of shooting gunpowder weapons changed dramatically over those three hundred years.

The scenes in Africa are pretty accurate in terms of what was going on at the time. In the early 16th century Europe really had nothing except guns that the Africans could not make better for themselves. Cowrie shells from the Indian Ocean were valuable as coin in West Africa, and that is mostly what was traded. Elmina, in present day Ghana, north of the action in the story, is mentioned several times. The fort there later became one of the most important transshipping points for the Atlantic slave trade. The places mentioned in the story are real places, many of the names have changed over time.

I am giving the story a 9 for plot, it gets an A, it gets a 10 for interest to the reviewer. However, this story needs a proofreader, it really needs a proofreader. It wasn't enough to ruin the experience, there would be no review if it had; I would not have continued reading. I am giving it a 6 for technical, which is grammar and spelling. Lots of typos, sloppy.

All in all, a fun read.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 6 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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