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The Slipper by Just Anybody

Author's Description:
At 16, he's handsome, brilliant, financially secure, and an orphan. There's a pool in his backyard and parties every weekend. When he goes to college, it's a repeat until he falls in love, but then her funeral nearly destroys him. Five years later, she comes back into his life, and he falls in love again, or does she? How does this work? A coming of age story with a few twists and turns.
Size: 141 KB ( ~ 26,738 words)
Sex Contents: Minimal Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, mt/ft, Consensual, Romantic

Review by barron of ideas   [other reviews by barron of ideas]

Reviewed: 2016-01-25

Here is another very good story I think most readers will enjoy. Although the hero enjoys a lot of women, the sex is relatively subdued. It has a happy ending and a business theme, with considerable school and college experiences included to help understand how the characters grow and develop.

Numerically the plot is a 7, a B. There are some location changes but not a lot of surprises. Technical Quality is a 9, an A plus. I didn't see any errors. Appeal to Reviewer is an 8, an A. I like the ending particularly, all though the rest is fine. Some of the opening chapters left things the author chose not to explore, like what happened to the video record of girls changing clothes in the pool house. The hero starts not as nice a person as he ends up.

The characters require a certain amount of suspension of disbelief. So smart the hero doesn't need to go to class. Girls so beautiful they take his breath away and fall in love with him instantly. Its good fiction. Some bad things happen off screen but don't impact the mood of the story. I don't guarantee everyone will like it, but I suggest you try it. I liked it.

Plot: 7 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 8