David's Life - Book II: Just Like Starting Over by Diederik Rask

Author's Description:
David and Meri are back. No, not just back, but back in time. This is a do over. Sex is minimal and only hinted at and never a focus. This is the story of their lives from the time they come back, to graduation from high school. Who knew that the Master PC program existed back in the early 1980s? Violence is minimal, but there. The Djinni Nekita does not make an appearance, but is mentioned. There is some basis in history and all locations named are real, if not the people.
Size: 108 KB ( ~ 20,480 words)
Genre: Fantasy
Sex Contents: Minimal Sex
Tags: mt/ft, Consensual, Romantic, Heterosexual, Fiction, Science Fiction, DoOver, Interracial, White Couple, Black Female, Safe Sex, Slow, Violent

Review by Threesheets   [other reviews by Threesheets]

Reviewed: 2016-04-10

This is a story that was hard to finish.

David has his plan laid out through college and beyond. This is a good thing.

The editing was good as was the word usage. (I'm a bit of an asshole when it come to proper word usage and such.)

My main complaint was that it read like a list. Granted a list with sentences but there was minimum character interaction or development.

The only interaction was a paragraph or two about a teacher who didn't grade properly. A paragraph of interaction between David and a friend and a mugging attempt. The last two were taken care of in less than three paragraphs.

It's a good story if you like this style of writing.


Plot: 7 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 2