Suck It Up by Lyndon Brown

Description: She said "I've been seeing someone else."
Size: 7 KB ( ~ 1,327 words)
Type: Flash
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Revenge, Violent

Review by Jim S   [other reviews by Jim S]

Reviewed: 2015-01-14

Let's address the technical first. Excellent wordsmithing. Either the author is excellent at proofreading or his editor is. In either case, kudos.

Storywise, it was disappointing. Not enough support for the main conflict -- the wife's infidelity, and the resolution. This story promised more and delivered a very disappointing conclusion. Abrupt and not fully justified.

Kudos for the premise of the story, though.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 5