A Hard Time by Dave177793

Author's Description:
This is a fanfic of the Hard Times by Amanda Serve. It tells the tale of what could have happened if things had went differently while Savannah Danville was in the Teen Detention Center.
Size: 18 KB ( ~ 3,413 words)
Genre: Fan Fiction
Sex Contents: Minimal Sex
Tags: Ma/ft, Fa/ft, Consensual, NonConsensual, Reluctant, Slavery, BiSexual, Fan Fiction, Grand Parent, DomSub, Spanking, Light Bond, First, Safe Sex, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Double Penetration

Review by amandaserve   [other reviews by amandaserve]

Reviewed: 2014-10-30

First, let me say that I am fairly biased in that I started the Family Feud Universe and this story is set in one of my favorite stories in that universe.

It's only fair that I offer that to you up front as a reviewer.

That means I am intimately familiar with the characters Dave used in his story (with the exception of the Dahlmeyers - his own addition/creation).

What I liked about the story: It offers a tiny little taste of something that happened in one of the character's past. It is a vignette that doesn't waste too much time getting to the 'sex' part. That is something in my own stories I tend to prolong and I like to see short stories deliver this way.

If you are looking for a short story and are a fan of Hard Times (currently at 65 chapters and growing) then this is a nice read.

If you have never heard of the stories in Family Feud - you may not understand who everyone is right off - but I think you can enjoy it as well.

What I did not like about this story:

I thought it was a little too short. I would loved to have seen more from Dave and I know he can stretch himself as an author. This story could have easily been twice as long as told the same chain of events. I want to smell the smells, hear the sounds, taste what the character's taste. I want to be the fly on the wall.

I would have also liked to hear this from the point of view of someone who was present instead of a nameless narrator.

That aside - I think it is a welcome addition to the Family Feud story line and I loved it.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10