Schoolgirl Thighs - My Downfall by Daydreamz

Author's Description:
Our hero is a successful twenty-seven-year-old teacher. Big, strong, fit and clever, he has it all. Looks too. So just the one little weakness really.
Size: 100 KB ( ~ 18,963 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/ft, Blackmail, Heterosexual, Fiction, School, FemaleDom, Orgy, First, Teacher/Student

Review by Belinda LaPage   [other reviews by Belinda LaPage]

Reviewed: 2014-09-19

Dr Justin Richards: schoolteacher, dual degrees, PhD, assistant Head of Department ... and helplessly horny thigh guy. But not any old thighs; oh no. In fact, no old thighs at all, thank you very much. You see, Dr Richards has a bit of a ... a penchant ... a fancy ... a thing, if you will, for the young, nubile athletic thighs of his 15 and 16-year-old Year 10 students.

AND THEY KNOW IT. Sandra is a tall, 16yo brunette with an athletic build and the powerful, toned thighs that come from field hockey. Sandra is the leader of the gang. Jill (sweet and petite, 15yo) and Melanie (sensuous and adventurous, also 15yo) are the rest of the gang.

All are virgins - and Dr Richards doesn't know this yet - but it sounds like being a very temporary state of affairs.

If Chapter 1 is any indication of things to come, then Daydreamz is going to have a horde of salivating followers waiting on his (I think) every post.

The story is narrated by Dr Richards in a voice so convincing and original, even a woman can go along for the guilty ride with him as he falls prey to these sexy, scheming lolitas.

As a rule, I don't read serials. I started this one because I didn't see the "In progress" tag before I opened it ... and it would have been my loss if I had seen it. Chapter 1 stands alone as a high quality stroke story with delicious thick cocks and tiny virgins all lovingly described in beautiful, lucid prose that almost reads itself.

I so hope Daydreamz takes this story only as far as it has legs for (pun intended) and no further. He will receive much admiration for his wonderful writing, and there will be temptation to simply flip-flop the characters through a bizarre bazaar of kinks and fetishes just to keep the story rolling.

Having said that, what we have here is a highly skilled writer, so I must have faith that he will employ his vast talent for good and not evil.

I just cannot wait for the next two chapters.

PLOT: 9 (Great) - Early days yet. It is only Chapter 1. The thigh fetish is a nice hook to add to the schoolteacher / lolita cliche. And I don't mean cliche in a nasty way. These things are repeated hundreds of times for a reason: they are damned sexy when done well and hard to get sick of. And this one is done well.

TECHNICAL: 10 (Amazing) - I think I saw one error - one that spell-checker wouldn't get. Not only was the spelling and grammar otherwise faultless, the structure of sentences and paragraphs was perfect, the pace of the story was consistent, and the language was just so perfectly clean. It is SUCH and easy read. Stunning!

APPEAL TO ME: 9 (Great) - I prefer schoolgirls demure rather than dominating, but that's just me. After all, this score is about appeal to ME, but it's hardly Daydreamz' fault. The prose of the sex was less perfect than that of the tense build up. Although very good, it tended just slightly towards the shopping list of things he did to her. Some of her responses were included, but I wanted more. What I really wanted more of though, are Justin's feelings. We got them in spades earlier in the story, but the sights and smells and tastes and sounds and textures as his throbbing meat impaled her sweet, virgin sex need to be spread like peanut butter, not Vegemite. (Sorry, Australian joke).

That's a long explanation for why I docked a mark, and its a harsh one, because this chapter is damn near faultless.

VERDICT: 9 (Great) - Daydreamz has skilz! I am delighted to discover this story when the score is hovering below 7, because when it lifts I am going to take some small credit for it.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9