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Going Straight to Hell by Levi Charon

Author's Description:
In the early depression 30's, a young man escapes the clutches of the law and finds shelter with a young mother and her two children living in the heart of Appalachia. He and the mother find they have some common needs and become devoted to each other.
Size: 127 KB ( ~ 24,083 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/ft, mt/Fa, Consensual, First

Review by Jim S   [other reviews by Jim S]

Reviewed: 2017-09-11


With “Going Straight To Hell”, the author writes a good old fashioned romance that feels as comfortable as your favorite pair of jeans, and will leave you with a nice warm feeling when its finished. At least it did me. This is another one of those stories that could have ended up coming unwound by trying to do too much. But LC did just enough, sort of like Goldilocks --- not too much, not too little, just about enough.

The main and minor characters are sufficiently developed though it takes the entire story in the case of two of them. A minor criticism could be offered on the dialogue as LC tries to capture an authentic backwoods patois and maybe goes a little overboard. But it detracts hardly at all so it doesn't really get in the way.

Spelling and grammar (excepting the backwoods dialogue) are excellent. No homophonic nor homonymic errors that I can remember. I'd recommend it for your reading pleasure if you want to spend a couple of hours that will leave you feeling good.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9