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Author's Description:
I was invited to the neighbor girl's Sweet 16 party. I didn't really want to go but at least there was cake. Then there was even more.
Size: 23 KB (4,275 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: mt/ft, First

Review by fuzzywuzzy   [other reviews by fuzzywuzzy]

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Sometimes a story has that tiny little something that takes it out of the mundane into the superb; and this one did it for me!
Courtnayès sixteenth birthday arrives and with it the boy next door who decided some years ago that she was not worth the effort. But then who knew what the only boy at the party could be used for by the girls at the sleep-over.
And then Courtnay crosses the boundaries of foreplay ... Well, there was still some fabulous birthday cake left in the kitchen!

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by pairadice   [other reviews by pairadice]

Reviewed:


This is a fine coming-of-age story that has just enough background and age-realistic conversation to elevate it above your run of the mill stroke stories.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by mbeau   [other reviews by mbeau]

Reviewed:


Jeez. I wish I knew girls like this.

Anyways, this is quite an amazing story. Short, but it leaves the potential open for a much longer follow-up story. I really hope that just-this-guy does a much longer story about this.

Even though I was pretty sure that I knew where the story would end up, the path there was not at all what I expected. Some interesting twists along the way (as well as one that didn't happen that I thought I saw coming) kept it very interesting.

Plot: 7 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by Stormy Weather   [other reviews by Stormy Weather]

Reviewed: - (Review Updated: )


The young narrator in this piece gets his cookies to go along with his cake; and the result is a delighful well written first time experience.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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